STAR TREK: RAVENLIN: THE DIEING SHORES

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by atpatp, Mar 24, 2011.

  1. atpatp

    atpatp Ensign Red Shirt

    Joined:
    Mar 24, 2011
  2. atpatp

    atpatp Ensign Red Shirt

    Joined:
    Mar 24, 2011
    No reviews? I'd really like to know how bad I suck.:p
     
  3. cathouse_joe

    cathouse_joe Ensign

    Joined:
    Mar 30, 2011
    You don't suck. You're actually a decent writer, but isn't "dieing" spelled "dying"? Instead of "acid smoke" try "acrid smoke". I've written a few stories on AdAstra and I'd love to see your's there, too.