An original Star Trek story based on and set during the events of Destiny novels. http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6688339/1/STAR_TREK_RAVENLIN_THE_DIEING_SHORES So far seven chapters.
You don't suck. You're actually a decent writer, but isn't "dieing" spelled "dying"? Instead of "acid smoke" try "acrid smoke". I've written a few stories on AdAstra and I'd love to see your's there, too.