Project: Potemkin "Archway" S01-G

Discussion in 'Fan Productions' started by Potemkin_Prod, Mar 15, 2013.

  1. Potemkin_Prod

    Potemkin_Prod Commodore Commodore

    Joined:
    Jan 11, 2010
    Location:
    Metro-Birmingham, Alabama
    A once populated planet is now uninhabited, and the only clue is an archway in the middle of a town square. A landing party from the Potemkin has beamed down to investigate.

    This 6 min 46 sec vignette stars Doug Harper, Hannah Ruiz, Richard Thornton and Jeffrey Green. It was directed by Doug Harper and edited by Rick Foxx. Music by Tony Lunn and script by Randall Landers.

    You can view it on Youtube: http://youtu.be/4k7JwntuTFk

    And on Vimeo: http://vimeo.com/61917548

    Please let us know what you think!
     
    Last edited: Mar 16, 2013
  2. Sir Rhosis

    Sir Rhosis Commodore Commodore

    Joined:
    Nov 17, 2001
    Location:
    Cincinnati, OH
    ^^^No, dude, you wrote this one. Credit where it is due. :) Been a long day, huh?
     
  3. Potemkin_Prod

    Potemkin_Prod Commodore Commodore

    Joined:
    Jan 11, 2010
    Location:
    Metro-Birmingham, Alabama
    LOL Very. Now I've got to fix this problem EVERYWHERE!.
     
  4. Sir Rhosis

    Sir Rhosis Commodore Commodore

    Joined:
    Nov 17, 2001
    Location:
    Cincinnati, OH
    What happened on the color scheme? I thought it was decided to go with a gold hue. This does tie into the hell theme better, though.

    SR
     
  5. Potemkin_Prod

    Potemkin_Prod Commodore Commodore

    Joined:
    Jan 11, 2010
    Location:
    Metro-Birmingham, Alabama
    The color scheme is the one selected by the director, Doug Harper, from the choices offered by the editor, Rick Foxx. Being slightly color-blind (anomalous trichromat), I wouldn't trust myself to make that sort of artistic decision.

    But the idea was to create a rather alien look to our planet, especially since it's surrounded by a reddish orange nebula.
     
  6. The Cutest of Borg

    The Cutest of Borg Vice Admiral Admiral

    Joined:
    Feb 15, 2002
    Location:
    The Cutest of Borg - Metro Phoenix, AZ
    I thought the color grade we used actually worked better with the sky effects Randy created.
     
  7. Potemkin_Prod

    Potemkin_Prod Commodore Commodore

    Joined:
    Jan 11, 2010
    Location:
    Metro-Birmingham, Alabama
    I actually created those in gray and added a color filter and then tweaked the hue and saturation. But I agree, the result does look really good, and even hides the cobweb on the lens.
     
  8. USS Jack Riley

    USS Jack Riley Captain Captain

    Joined:
    Sep 19, 2005
    Location:
    Cubicle Hell
    As I recall, when the vfx all came together, gold didn't work.
     
  9. USS Jack Riley

    USS Jack Riley Captain Captain

    Joined:
    Sep 19, 2005
    Location:
    Cubicle Hell
    BTW, for those that don't know me, I am Doug Harper and I directed this vignette and played Cmdr. Delaney. I am interested in any feedback regarding my direction and acting. I am preparing to direct another vignette this weekend. I appreciate anything you can offer that might improve that effort.
     
  10. Potemkin_Prod

    Potemkin_Prod Commodore Commodore

    Joined:
    Jan 11, 2010
    Location:
    Metro-Birmingham, Alabama
    Let's just keep GOLD in mind for another episode. I'd still like to do a blue or even that bright white we looked at.
     
  11. xortex

    xortex Commodore

    Joined:
    Apr 25, 2006
    Location:
    Staten Island, NY
    It has a TNG 'Ship in a Bottle' vibe too, with an alternate reality in the place of a holosuite reality per se. Now they have to meet another Starship Potemkin with the real Captain aboard - somebody else! from another Starfleet Federation.
     
  12. Potemkin_Prod

    Potemkin_Prod Commodore Commodore

    Joined:
    Jan 11, 2010
    Location:
    Metro-Birmingham, Alabama
    Thanks!

    So you're suggesting a "Journey to the Farside of the Sun" sort of thing? Or "Farside of the Galaxy" in this case?
     
  13. doubleohfive

    doubleohfive Fleet Admiral

    Joined:
    Aug 17, 2001
    Location:
    Hollywood, CA
    I watched this vignette last Friday. Having had some time to stew on it, here are my thoughts:

    I like the color palette used. I mean, it's a tad gimmicky, but it works here. Certainly it fits the ultimate purpose of the archway, at least as far as cultural significance and depiction go, so there's that.

    As far as the acting goes, there's not much to say beyond actually letting your actors emote and react to their surroundings. I get that this was especially an effects heavy shoot/episode, but given what was (I assume) on the page, there should have been a little more gravitas to what the actors portrayed.

    Then again, it's a short vignette, with really one set and only so much going on... I'm not sure what the impetus was for the away team to suddenly fire at the archway. They don't seem to spend much time actually investigating it, let alone consider the implications of what it actually is or even if it is what they think it is, what that actually means for the universe. Lastly, if there's enough evidence to suggest (as the characters seem to believe, given the final captain's log entry and the tag scene), why would these educated Starfleet officers believe, even for a moment that a little bit of phaser fire would solve the problem?

    My last nit, and really it's just more a product of having lived with television production schedules for the last couple of years more than anything else ... the location shooting was great, but the vignette could have benefited from one scene on the bridge or with the Captain aboard. I don't know if that was just logistically impossible because of schedule conflicts, actor availability, or what not, but certainly pickups could be done the next time something is shot on the bridge for use later in a short like this.

    Overall I was impressed. I like the concept of the story, and I think it poses some interesting questions, but the execution of how the characters respond to those questions was just a little lacking for me.

    Looking forward to the next ep/vignette!
     
  14. Potemkin_Prod

    Potemkin_Prod Commodore Commodore

    Joined:
    Jan 11, 2010
    Location:
    Metro-Birmingham, Alabama
    Thanks, Double-Oh. I appreciate the feedback.

    The impetus for firing their phasers stems from the realization of Commander Delaney that the lines Science Officer Spampinato reads come directly from Dante's Inferno and are etched above the gates of Hell. Delaney realizes that, hears the moaning, and opens fire while ordering Frazier to do so. The fact that it needs explaining means we failed on that point.

    Interesting perspective. We actually filmed Grigory on the bridge with his lines (when we filmed "Delivery," in fact) and it just didn't work for me. I thought it worked better as a voice over, but I concede it might not have been the right approach.
     
  15. USS Jack Riley

    USS Jack Riley Captain Captain

    Joined:
    Sep 19, 2005
    Location:
    Cubicle Hell
    Doubleohfive - thanks for the input. Definitely some things to consider for this weekend. Glad to hear the colorizing of the screen worked for you in this situation. I will definitely work on betting emotional output from the actors on this episode in that they will react to what is happening on screen better.

    Again, thanks for your input.
     
  16. doubleohfive

    doubleohfive Fleet Admiral

    Joined:
    Aug 17, 2001
    Location:
    Hollywood, CA
    I get the inference to Dante's Inferno; And yeah, it makes sense that knowing what that inference refers to/means, I can sort of see why there would be that reaction.

    As for the voice over vs. actual scenes on the bridge, your logic on that is good too, in that I can see how as simply a voiceover, it works to contribute to the overall chill the short is designed to create; the only reason I mentioned it before was that the cost of that "chill" is a severe limiting of scope in this vignette. But like I said, very impressive stuff. Keep up the great work!
     
  17. Potemkin_Prod

    Potemkin_Prod Commodore Commodore

    Joined:
    Jan 11, 2010
    Location:
    Metro-Birmingham, Alabama
    We appreciate that, Double-Oh!
     
  18. Sir Rhosis

    Sir Rhosis Commodore Commodore

    Joined:
    Nov 17, 2001
    Location:
    Cincinnati, OH
    Honestly, I think it is probably just the thought of getting the short vignettes done in a single weekend that drives us to set them either entirely on location or entirely on the bridge. For good or bad...

    Sir Rhosis
     
  19. Potemkin_Prod

    Potemkin_Prod Commodore Commodore

    Joined:
    Jan 11, 2010
    Location:
    Metro-Birmingham, Alabama
    That's probably quite true in general, David. But in "Beach Towel" (which will be seen in its entirety at TrekTrax Atlanta as a sneak preview) and "Second Contact," we filmed the majority of the episode on location and then shot a brief tag scene on a set. I have to admit that it gives closure...