Looking for critiques of my writing

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by Kevin W., Jan 1, 2013.

  1. Kevin W.

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    Explaining the language thing would give away a plot point that I don't want to reveal yet. Sorry.

    As for the Remington's size and complement, that I'm not totally sure about. Since I'm revamping the design, that's something I'll have to work out later.
     
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    Unfortunately, I've been busy over the past few weeks, but I've added a bit more.
     
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    Ok, I have a question for anyone who's reading this: how do you suggest honing my narrative-writing skills? I don't have any issue writing dialogue, but as you can see by comparing my fiction to others, the non-dialogue portions are severely lacking. I just have trouble envisioning how to write it in my head.
     
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    Anyone?
     
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    Long time no see, everyone. Here's the latest update to episode 1.

    https://docs.google.com/file/d/0B-DNbUE0EKNHY1FaM3RmblA4UTA/edit?usp=sharing

    You'll notice there's a significant chunk of story missing near the end. That's intentional. I already had the scene between Boswell and Trevak written ahead of time for various reasons. I'm in the process of writing the bits that lead to that scene. Enjoy.
     
  7. Sandoval

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    Never a good sign when the last six replies are all your own is it?
     
  8. Kevin W.

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    Yeah... :(
     
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    I just thought I'd check to see if there was anyone still alive in here.
     
  10. Kevin W.

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    Well, thanks for caring.
     
  11. Sandoval

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    Why not try engaging in other people's work and perhaps they will return the favour, rather than expecting to receive people's time yet giving nothing back?

    Go and critique other members work and generate some goodwill that could result in those members wishing to return the favour.

    Sometimes you get what you give.
     
  12. Kevin W.

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    Point taken.
     
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