Interesting trims from Star Trek scripts

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  1. Richard Baker

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    Didn't McCoy identify himself as "McCoy, son of David" at the Vulcan ceremony at the end of STIII?
     
  2. Marsden

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    You are correct!

    PRIESTESS: (in Vulcan) Kal-tor kal-if-fah.
    PRIESTESS: Sarek, ...child of Skon, ...child of Solkar, the body of your son breathes still. What is your wish?
    SAREK: I ask for fal-tor-pan, the refusion.
    PRIESTESS: What you seek has not been done since ages past, and then, only in legend. Your request is not logical.
    SAREK: Forgive me, T'Lar. My logic is uncertain where my son is concerned.
    PRIESTESS: Who is the Keeper of the katra?
    McCOY: I am ...McCoy, ...Leonard H., ...Son of David.
    PRIESTESS: McCoy, son of David, since thou art human, we cannot expect thee to understand fully what Sarek has requested. Spock's body lives. ...With your approval, we shall use all our powers to return to his body that which you possess. But McCoy, ...you must now be warned! The danger to thyself is as grave as the danger to Spock. ...You must make the choice.
    McCOY: I choose the danger. ...Hell of time to ask.

    So Sarek should have been Sarek McSkonMcSokar?
    :p
     
  3. GSchnitzer

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    So this is a bit interesting. It's interesting to see the roots of the toast that Dr. Tristan Adams gives in "Dagger of the Mind." with Captain Kirk, Dr. Noel, and (sort of) Lethe. Here's the final version from the episode as aired:

    ADAMS
    "To all mankind...
    may we never find space so vast,
    planets so cold,
    heart and mind so empty
    that we cannot fill them
    with love and warmth."

    But here it is from the earlier Revised Final Draft script:

    ADAMS
    "To mankind... may we never find
    space so vast, planets so cold..."

    Adams looks to Kirk, gets a smile and a nod; Kirk
    completing it.

    KIRK
    "...or our own hearts so empty
    that we cannot fill and warm them
    all." Amen, Doctor.

    So, this is interesting for a few reasons:

    1. It was originally conceived to be such a common toast that while Adams started it, Kirk was able to finish it.
    2. It was originally hoped that our own hearts won't be found empty--not other people's hearts.
    3. Kirk topped it off with an "Amen, Doctor"--probably much like McCoy's "Amen to that, Scotty" from "Mudd's Women."
     
  4. Green Shirt

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    As a 20 year US Postal Service employee who has never stolen mail, nor shot a co-worker - I resemble that comment. ;)
     
  5. BillJ

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    [yt]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LL6ubXD9ZjY[/yt]
     
  6. GSchnitzer

    GSchnitzer Co-Executive Producer Moderator

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    Yet.
     
  7. The Old Mixer

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    (Psst...dude, way to antagonize him....)
     
  8. Green Shirt

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    Yet. Yeah, that goes without saying. :devil:
     
  9. Tiberius

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    We need a TNG version of this thread...
     
  10. GSchnitzer

    GSchnitzer Co-Executive Producer Moderator

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    Sometimes there's some little content from a script that isn't really all that significant, but it fills in a gap--at least in nomenclature for some Trek props.

    We all know these clipboard-thingies:

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    They were ubiquitous in TOS. These were the 1960's-era "magic slates" put into a black frame with a couple of blinkies at the top and a single push button. Kirk and Spock (and, well, McCoy and Uhura, for that matter) were forever reading and signing them with a fancy three-sided stylus. But what were they called? Did they ever have a name? What can or should we call them when referring to them? Over the years, I've seen "TOS logbook," "Captain's logbook," "data pad," "PADD (personal success display device)," "electronic clipboard," and about 50 other titles--all of which make some amount of sense.

    It turns out, the July 27, 1967 Final Draft script for "The Deadly Years" makes reference to this prop in Scene 48:

    48 ANOTHER ANGLE

    as Kirk starts toward his command chair, YEOMAN DORIS
    ATKINS moves to him, with an electronic Feinberger
    board
    in her hand.

    YEOMAN ATKINS
    Will you sign this, sir?

    Kirk glances at it, takes the pen from her, scribbles
    his name on the board and hands it back to her. She
    accepts it and walks back to her post. Kirk turns his
    attention to Commodore Stocker.

    (etc., etc., etc.)

    Folks may remember that an important plot point involves the aging Kirk forgetting having signed the "fuel consumption report" that was displayed on this "electronic Feinberger board" device.

    But the "important' (and I use the term hesitatingly) walkaway is that this thing was called an "electronic Feinberger board."

    Of course, Irving Feinberg was the Property Master on Star Trek, and so many different things were (tongue firmly in cheek) named after him (such as the "Feinberg oscillating framizam" and the "Irvingoscope." So this would appear to be just another one of those many "Feinberg" devices.

    Lacking any actual "in-universe" title for these "futuristic" clipboards, the "electronic Feinberger board" would seem to be as good a name as any for these ubiquitous devices. It's become my term of preference when referring to these everyday Trek props.

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    Thanks to (the late) Mr. Kenny Delman ("kennyd") and (the not late) Mr. William Fink ("Sporak") for their hard work on fabricating these wonderful props for our production.)
     
  11. Christopher

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    ^The convention in the Pocket novels in recent years seems to be to call them "data slates."
     
  12. GSchnitzer

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    Yes, "data slates" is another one of those "about 50" terms in use for the "electronic Feinberger board" to which I referred. It's a fine convention to adopt: it's maybe the best term of them all.
     
  13. GSchnitzer

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    Here's another interesting script tidbit.

    We know that Harry Mudd was "wiving settlers"--transporting three women who ultimately were married off to the three Rigel miners. But there had been a fourth miner on Rigel until very recently. The May 26, 1966 Final Draft script for "Mudd's Women" had this interesting content--at Scene 74:

    74 ANOTHER ANGLE

    On Eve and Ben... at the window. In progress:

    BEN
    ...and it blows like that all
    the time.

    CAMERA MOVES IN PAST THEM TO VIEW THE OUTSIDE THROUGH
    THE WINDOW. It is darker outside now, a ghostly sight...
    a desert windstorm... vague forms appear and disappear as
    the gusts of wind ebb and flow with greater or less
    intensity. Over this:

    EVE
    There were four of you to start?

    BEN
    (nods)
    Charley Shorr stepped out into
    that last month. You can get
    lost a dozen feet from your own
    doorstep if the wind comes up
    sudden.

    FLASHES OF LIGHT from the direction of the obscured sky
    outside, a CRACKLING SOUND, not thunder, different. Eve is startled.

    BBEN
    Magnetic storm. You'll see the
    wind really rip, soon.

    **********

    No real commentary. Just an interesting detail that was dispensed with.
     
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  14. publiusr

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    I didn't see that one..
     
  15. Kevman7987

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    It's available to look at in the "Discovered Documents" section on the Mission Log Podcast website under Operation: Annihilate.
     
  16. alchemist

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    Very interesting. That scene was filmed and broadcast though pretty much as it was written in the Revised Final Draft dated May 31, 1966 (with assorted revised pages to June).
     
  17. trevanian

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    But in the 24th century, postal workers have evolved beyond petty jealousies and now work only to better themselves ...

    (that's only because the weather grid is in place & they can finally dispense with the 'neither rain nor sleet ... ')
     
  18. Green Shirt

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    That utopian crap will never spoil us !!!! ;)

    Anyway, its just like any other workplace where 10% of the people do 90% of the work. :klingon:
     
  19. publiusr

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    Thanks for that...amazing!