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Old March 31 2009, 08:16 PM   #271
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Re: Star Trek: Sigils and Unions--The Thirteenth Order

No problem!

I'm hoping maybe a few others will jump in and offer their feedback? As I move further into the battle, I'm going further and further out of familiar territory, so I'd definitely like to get an idea of what is and isn't working before I release other sections.
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Old April 1 2009, 07:34 PM   #272
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Hmm... good point. Up til Damar's rebellion, they probably would have brushed off the fact they were losing territory til after, thinking everything would be split after complete victory. Or like you say, obedience to the state is so important to them that they are thrilled with any commendation, like the guy that betrayed the Cardassians that Damar, Kira and co were going to meet.
For Cardassians to even think that they wouldn't be victorious seems to have bordered on treason under their system. Remember that even in their literature, Cardassia always wins, whether it be against external enemies (i.e. the discussion of Meditations on a Crimson Shadow) or internal ones (i.e. Shoggoth's enigma tales).

The way Garak and others talk suggest that obedience to the state IS everything to a lot of Cardassians.
Hmmm... that's true. And it runs deep. It also seems to handicap them at times, the belief that they can't lose and are totally superior- the Klingons feel that way, the Romulans do etc. It prevents them recognizing limitations, especially when there is no way to win. That's fine for arrogant leaders, but I feel bad for the rank and file, as it were. :S

I think maybe that's the difference between them, and my four guls (and by extension the crews under them): to my four guls, it's a certain ideal of the state that is key. And because of that...they're able to recognize and oppose deviations from that ideal. Their mindset allows them to take that giant leap, even though it came with great difficulty for them.

Now, that idea is spreading, especially now that Damar stood up in public and though he may not have said it in so many words, he illustrated it to be true...that sometimes you must oppose those in power in order to preserve the ideal.
It has a more realistic and thoughtful quality to it, and something that will benefit more of the overall population.

And I like this regular humour in a tense situation better then in some shows/episodes where something funny happens exclusively before a tragic death.
That's always a downer.
Especially when you see it coming, so you can't even think about the funny bits, it's just like, they're going to kill someone... who?
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Old April 1 2009, 09:05 PM   #273
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That last segment was quite good-and your Mathenite is proving quite formidable in a fight. Keep going!
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Old April 1 2009, 09:59 PM   #274
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That last segment was quite good-and your Mathenite is proving quite formidable in a fight. Keep going!
Thanks! Yeah, she's got a lot of power in a small package, kind of like the lupine/feline species of Earth.

That said...Mathenites don't usually involve themselves in war; Te-Mae-Do is unusual in that regard. Her people have a lot of strength, but something tells me that their beliefs usually only allow them to use it on predators and prey, and that like the Native Americans, they believe they must eat what they kill (and ALL parts they can eat), so as not to be wasteful of life. Not sure how she fits into society, or IF she even does, but that's kind of what I imagine.

And Marie--you're definitely right that the old way is a handicap. But even with those who think past the absolute unquestioning obedience...I still want them to stay...CARDASSIAN. I still want them to have that deep patriotism and loyalty, where rebellion is only a last resort but at least considered.
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Old April 2 2009, 11:40 PM   #275
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And Marie--you're definitely right that the old way is a handicap. But even with those who think past the absolute unquestioning obedience...I still want them to stay...CARDASSIAN. I still want them to have that deep patriotism and loyalty, where rebellion is only a last resort but at least considered.
That's probably because you like to respect alien cultures for what they are, their uniqueness etc. Not the Federation's shining a human/vulcan etc. magnifying glass on them.

You're not trying to assimilate them, or make them into human standards, your showing Cardassians for who they are, and also showing (unlike we often saw in ST) the "good" ones who felt for people in distress, and wanted to do things for the right reasons, even tho it may temporarily go against the grain... because if doing the right thing was so easy... everyone would do it.
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Old April 3 2009, 12:32 AM   #276
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^ Well put!

It's exactly what makes this such a compelling story, the various shades of gray. What does betrayal mean to a Cardassian and how do they fit into their societies and is there really such a thing as a 'good guy' Cardassian? I don't think the simplistic morality of the American western really leads itself to such a complex people.

Basically I love this story and can't wait to read more. Bravo!
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Old April 3 2009, 05:52 AM   #277
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And Marie--you're definitely right that the old way is a handicap. But even with those who think past the absolute unquestioning obedience...I still want them to stay...CARDASSIAN. I still want them to have that deep patriotism and loyalty, where rebellion is only a last resort but at least considered.
That's probably because you like to respect alien cultures for what they are, their uniqueness etc. Not the Federation's shining a human/vulcan etc. magnifying glass on them.
Eww, I get a creepy image there--more like a magnifying glass frying an ant. Something destructive to what it focuses on.

Definitely not what I want to do!

You're not trying to assimilate them, or make them into human standards, your showing Cardassians for who they are, and also showing (unlike we often saw in ST) the "good" ones who felt for people in distress, and wanted to do things for the right reasons, even tho it may temporarily go against the grain... because if doing the right thing was so easy... everyone would do it.
Exactly. We like to think that's a strictly Cardassian trait to say/do nothing when something is going on that's wrong--but that's definitely something we have to fight against ourselves.

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^ Well put!

It's exactly what makes this such a compelling story, the various shades of gray. What does betrayal mean to a Cardassian and how do they fit into their societies and is there really such a thing as a 'good guy' Cardassian? I don't think the simplistic morality of the American western really leads itself to such a complex people.

Basically I love this story and can't wait to read more. Bravo!
(and long live Cardassia!)
Thanks!

I think different Cardassians have a different idea of what it means. Even in THIS group there are some different definitions. I sure can't imagine Speros agreeing with Berat on that, for instance!
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Old April 4 2009, 06:08 PM   #278
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And Marie--you're definitely right that the old way is a handicap. But even with those who think past the absolute unquestioning obedience...I still want them to stay...CARDASSIAN. I still want them to have that deep patriotism and loyalty, where rebellion is only a last resort but at least considered.
That's probably because you like to respect alien cultures for what they are, their uniqueness etc. Not the Federation's shining a human/vulcan etc. magnifying glass on them.
Eww, I get a creepy image there--more like a magnifying glass frying an ant. Something destructive to what it focuses on.

Definitely not what I want to do!
Okay, we'll reword it.. how about a filter not a magnifying glass? That makes more sense...

You're not trying to assimilate them, or make them into human standards, your showing Cardassians for who they are, and also showing (unlike we often saw in ST) the "good" ones who felt for people in distress, and wanted to do things for the right reasons, even tho it may temporarily go against the grain... because if doing the right thing was so easy... everyone would do it.
Exactly. We like to think that's a strictly Cardassian trait to say/do nothing when something is going on that's wrong--but that's definitely something we have to fight against ourselves.
Oh, I agree completely! TBH, I'm a bit fond of Cardassia's swift justice of some crimes, their more decisive action. I think if that were put into practice here, you would see a reduction in rape, murder and abuse. If you knew that the punishment would be terrible, you'd learn to control youself. If you know that there will be years of court cases, a bunch of appeals, and a cell with good food, excercise, free cable etc... well, it's a pretty terrible deterrent. I'm not saying prison is fun, but the judicial system does a poor job of favouring the victims IMO.

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I agree.

Now that I've finished reading Betrayal, on the note of Berat, he seems like a smart, compassionate person who was in a hopeless situation and who needed a break. Also someone who would do the right thing if he could. So I can say at this point that I think you're representing his personality correctly, though since he's never appears on the series, though for some reason I thought he did... one of the Cardassians was in the Wounded other than Occet, right? But with only Betrayal in mind, I'll have to take a closer read of your Berat now...

I'm curious, why did you have him injured again in your fiction? To make the damage worse so he'd have to learn to trust others, and so others would see his loyalty and good leadership without all his physical abilities?
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Old April 4 2009, 06:19 PM   #279
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That's probably because you like to respect alien cultures for what they are, their uniqueness etc. Not the Federation's shining a human/vulcan etc. magnifying glass on them.
Eww, I get a creepy image there--more like a magnifying glass frying an ant. Something destructive to what it focuses on.

Definitely not what I want to do!
Okay, we'll reword it.. how about a filter not a magnifying glass? That makes more sense...
Yeah.

And speaking of filters, it's also fun to look at the other Trek races through a (moderate) Cardassian filter.

Exactly. We like to think that's a strictly Cardassian trait to say/do nothing when something is going on that's wrong--but that's definitely something we have to fight against ourselves.
Oh, I agree completely! TBH, I'm a bit fond of Cardassia's swift justice of some crimes, their more decisive action. I think if that were put into practice here, you would see a reduction in rape, murder and abuse. If you knew that the punishment would be terrible, you'd learn to control youself. If you know that there will be years of court cases, a bunch of appeals, and a cell with good food, excercise, free cable etc... well, it's a pretty terrible deterrent. I'm not saying prison is fun, but the judicial system does a poor job of favouring the victims IMO.[/quote]

No kidding.

And if anyone EVER touches a child...!

Now that I've finished reading Betrayal, on the note of Berat, he seems like a smart, compassionate person who was in a hopeless situation and who needed a break. Also someone who would do the right thing if he could. So I can say at this point that I think you're representing his personality correctly, though since he's never appears on the series, though for some reason I thought he did... one of the Cardassians was in the Wounded other than Occet, right? But with only Betrayal in mind, I'll have to take a closer read of your Berat now...
Daro was the other one who appeared in "The Wounded," the guy who went to Ten-Forward with O'Brien and ended up being snapped at twice.

I definitely look forward to what you think of Berat in both this and "Let He Who Has Eyes See," now that you've read Betrayal. And I'm going to e-mail you a little fun I had, shortly...

I'm curious, why did you have him injured again in your fiction? To make the damage worse so he'd have to learn to trust others, and so others would see his loyalty and good leadership without all his physical abilities?
Well...the latter explanation is a part of it.

But the majority of it may surprise you. In Betrayal you see him in a very rough state mentally/emotionally, and don't get to see the full potential of his strength.

The Volan III mission and the fallout from that...Berat may be worse off physically, but I really feel like I have a great opportunity to show (to borrow a phrase from Rush) grace under pressure. Sure, his circumstances aren't the best they could be, but I enjoy writing him from a much stronger position mentally and emotionally. I enjoy showing how the maturity and experience of seven years have let him grow. And that growth means that (to my mind), he was ready to bear this gracefully. In his case...what didn't kill him made him stronger as a person. I want people to see that in him and really respect him.

That kind of inner strength is an absolute essential for someone who's going to participate in an outright rebellion. I also think it's important to the team he's with, too, even though certain people (Speros!) don't see it.
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Okay, we'll reword it.. how about a filter not a magnifying glass? That makes more sense...
Yeah.

And speaking of filters, it's also fun to look at the other Trek races through a (moderate) Cardassian filter.
Also true...
I liked Garak in... that novel where he goes to earth with Sisko and finds out that people on earth have the right to protest etc.

Oh, I agree completely! TBH, I'm a bit fond of Cardassia's swift justice of some crimes, their more decisive action. I think if that were put into practice here, you would see a reduction in rape, murder and abuse. If you knew that the punishment would be terrible, you'd learn to control youself. If you know that there will be years of court cases, a bunch of appeals, and a cell with good food, excercise, free cable etc... well, it's a pretty terrible deterrent. I'm not saying prison is fun, but the judicial system does a poor job of favouring the victims IMO.
No kidding.

And if anyone EVER touches a child...!
Also true- that is showing up more and more on the news. Is there something in the water??

Daro was the other one who appeared in "The Wounded," the guy who went to Ten-Forward with O'Brien and ended up being snapped at twice.

I definitely look forward to what you think of Berat in both this and "Let He Who Has Eyes See," now that you've read Betrayal. And I'm going to e-mail you a little fun I had, shortly...
Yes!! Daro!
And thanks for the email- that was hilarious!!

I'm curious, why did you have him injured again in your fiction? To make the damage worse so he'd have to learn to trust others, and so others would see his loyalty and good leadership without all his physical abilities?
Well...the latter explanation is a part of it.

But the majority of it may surprise you. In Betrayal you see him in a very rough state mentally/emotionally, and don't get to see the full potential of his strength.

The Volan III mission and the fallout from that...Berat may be worse off physically, but I really feel like I have a great opportunity to show (to borrow a phrase from Rush) grace under pressure. Sure, his circumstances aren't the best they could be, but I enjoy writing him from a much stronger position mentally and emotionally. I enjoy showing how the maturity and experience of seven years have let him grow. And that growth means that (to my mind), he was ready to bear this gracefully. In his case...what didn't kill him made him stronger as a person. I want people to see that in him and really respect him.

That kind of inner strength is an absolute essential for someone who's going to participate in an outright rebellion. I also think it's important to the team he's with, too, even though certain people (Speros!) don't see it.
Makes sense to me- especially since he was going to have a disability regardless. If that hadn't happened, the problem may have manifested itself only in the worst of times, with devastating consequences that would have ruined his career, and possibly cost lives.
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If it was even going to manifest itself at all, and I'm not sure if it would have without something drastic happening--as it did. At least in my version of events, by the time of the Volan III incident (2 years later), he'd healed to the point where only a medical scanner could pick up that anything had ever happened.

And that's funny about Garak!!!
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Poor Berat... it must have been so hard to have dodged death, healed and then to have that happen again. Plus he's an engineer!!

Speros can tell his nonsense in a vacuum.
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You know...it can be very hard on him, yes--especially because the Volan III incident wouldn't have gone so badly if not for his own past. But that said...the events of Betrayal also put a hell of a fire into him--hence his decision to fight the discharge orders.

Now, Berat puts up with Speros...but DON'T give him ideas. Speros + airlock + faulty pressure sensor...I'm sure he's dreamed of how to do it even though I don't think Berat would ever stoop to that level.
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No, I think that's above Berat too... but maybe someone less scrupulous will get sick of his attitude...
Not advocating, it could happen!
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When's the next part?

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