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|July 4 2015, 07:53 AM||#1|
DS9 11x22 - "Penitence" SEASON FINALE!
Time for the SEASON FINALE - episode 22.
Again, this episode dramatises events first described post facto in the licensed DS9 novel Rough Beasts of Empire by David R George III.
Here's the links:
Deep Space Nine Season 10 - eps 1 to 22
11x01 - "Systems Under Repair" (Ad Astra, pdf, ebook)
As Ro settles into command, Prynn pleads for help with rescuing her father.
11x02 - "Structural Integrity Compromised" (Ad Astra, pdf, ebook)
While the Defiant responds to a distress call, Prynn tracks down answers.
11x03 - "Self Destruct Initiated" (Ad Astra, pdf, ebook)
A survivor of the Ascendant attack causes havoc in the Bajoran system.
11x04 - "Separation Manoeuvres Complete" (Ad Astra, pdf, ebook)
Things fall apart for Kira, Odo and the Dominion alliance.
11x05 - "The New Normal" (Ad Astra, pdf, ebook)
After Vaughn’s return to the station, new crew arrangements need to be made.
11x06 - "Two Steps Forward" (AdAstra, pdf, ebook)
Cardassia sends a new representative to the station, but not everyone welcomes him.
11x07 - "In Love and War" (AdAstra, pdf, ebook)
Vaughn assigns Prynn, Nog and Candlewood to a secret mission on Empok Nor.
11x08 - "Puppy Love" (AdAstra, pdf, ebook)
As Pif tries to find a job on the station, Quark and Ro babysit the puppies.
11x09 - "The Laughing Policeman" (AdAstra, pdf, ebook)
The station’s new security chief arrives, leaving Major Cenn with a dilemma.
11x10 - "Gut Feelings" (AdAstra, pdf, ebook)
When Raiq falls ill, the situation could lead to catastrophe for the crew.
11x11 - "The Crucible" (AdAstra, pdf, ebook)
When Vaughn takes Ro on a training voyage, things go from bad to worse.
11x12 - "Vigil" (AdAstra, pdf, ebook)
Sisko’s friend Prylar Eivos dies, leading to problems between him and Kasidy.
11x13 - "The Late Show! With Morn" (AdAstra, pdf, ebook)
It’s your new favourite chat show, starring the most talkative man in the galaxy.
11x14 - "No Confidence" (AdAstra, pdf, ebook)
Raiq asks Kira to take her back through the wormhole to look for more Ascendants.
11x15 - "Never See It Coming" (AdAstra, pdf, ebook)
A challenge to Kai Solis’s leadership leads to tensions on the station and Bajor.
11x16 - "Unleashed" (AdAstra, pdf, ebook)
Candlewood discovers a strange computer program that runs amok on the station.
11x17 - "Whistleblower" (AdAstra, pdf, ebook)
Someone has released military secrets to the public. Then Quark is arrested.
11x18 - "The Never-Ending Sacrifice" (Memory Beta)
At the new Cardassian Embassy on Earth, Garak receives an unexpected visitor.
11x19 - "Gratitude" (AdAstra, pdf, ebook)
It’s Gratitude Festival time, and there are celebrations on DS9 and Bajor.
11x20 - "Fugitive" (AdAstra, pdf, ebook)
Rebecca has been kidnapped, and all of Bajor is looking for the kidnapper.
11x21 - "Inferno" (AdAstra, pdf, ebook)
A monstrous hybrid killer is on the loose, while Kira brings enemies together.
11x22 - "Penitence" (AdAstra, pdf, ebook)
With a ticking clock until disaster, the life of Sisko’s daughter is on the line.
|July 4 2015, 08:07 AM||#2|
Re: DS9 11x22 - "Penitence" SEASON FINALE!
1 MONTAGE FROM PREVIOUS EPS
-- Vaughn disappears from main engineering, and appears in the white space of the wormhole (10x22 “Ascension”)
This season, on Star Trek: Deep
-- Rebecca takes Vaughn’s hand, begins to lead him out of the white space (11x04 “Separation Manoeuvres Complete”)
Come on. Time to go. Daddy’s
waiting for us.
Okay, Rebecca. Take me home.
-- In the commander’s office (11x05 “The New Normal”)
I have been officially promoted to
captain and assigned as the new
commanding officer of Deep Space
Nine. I am officially inviting you
to be first officer.
Thank you, Captain. I accept.
-- Ro introduces Evik to Cenn in the security office. They shake hands (11x09 “The Laughing Policeman”)
(v.o. from 11x05)
Now, we’ll need a new chief
security officer to replace you.
-- Hetik meets Candlewood in the corridor (11x05)
I heard you got a promotion. Chief
Science Officer, that’s amazing!
Oh... yeah... thank you.
-- Vaughn talks to Prynn in the office, plus his transfer approval on the screen (11x05)
I might not be here all the
time... but I will be here when
you need me.
-- Major Cenn is running Ops, listening to Corporal Renta over the comm (11x03 “Self Destruct Initiated”)
Ascendants, Major. Here. Now.
In the Bajoran system.
-- Raiq opens the door to find Kira waiting (11x03)
We need your help.
-- Kira, Raiq, Sisko and Prynn in the runabout, chasing after Axno (11x03)
Why would the Prophets let one of
these people into the Alpha Quadrant?
-- Kira, Raiq and Axno in the shrine (11x03)
Axno... what are you doing?
My sister, please...
You are no sister of mine.
-- Axno BURSTS into a massive ball of flame. Raiq casts her hands out and forms an instant force field (11x03)
-- Vaughn and Ro revealing their secret to Prynn, Nog and Candlewood (11x07 “In Love and War”)
We need a mystery solved.
What kind of mystery?
The kind that’s called... an
It’s Axno’s ship.
-- Inside the ship, the silver material creeps up Prynn’s arm (11x07)
Get it off me!
-- The ship fires, blasting a hole in the wall of Empok Nor, air screaming through the hole (11x07)
It’s alive, sir. It’s a living
creature, and it’s healing.
I cracked some of the bio-signals
It turns out that Empok Nor was
the perfect place to hide it. With
no fusion core on the station, and
no pilot, the ship has nothing
to feed off.
-- Kira confronts Vaughn in the Defiant corridor outside sickbay (11x10 “Gut Feelings”)
I get why you didn’t tell Raiq
about the ship. But why couldn’t
you tell me?
Why would I? You’re not Starfleet
anymore. You’re not even Militia.
You resigned. To put it bluntly,
Nerys, you’re no longer one of us.
-- Raiq in the grip of the vessel, being healed (11x10)
You know it only takes one ship
and one pilot to destroy an entire
star system, and you want me to
just hand it over?
You don’t know her. She’s changed.
-- The big argument in the commander’s office (11x10)
You’re outnumbered, Captain.
You think this is some kind of
democracy? You follow my orders.
Not if the orders are wrong, sir.
-- Vaughn gestures at the Defiant’s main viewscreen, with its tumbling debris of the holographic Deep Space Nine (11x11 “The Crucible”)
And what about those thousands
of dead people?
There are no dead people!
The day will come. I guarantee it.
Then I’ll deal with it my way.
-- Vaughn makes his announcement on stage (11x13 “The Late Show! With Morn”)
This is not going to be easy for
me to say. But I will be leaving
Deep Space Nine soon.
-- Vaughn transfers command, in Ops (11x14 “No Confidence”)
I relieve you, sir.
I stand relieved.
-- Ro and Cenn in the office (11x15 “Never See It Coming”)
I’m going to need an executive
officer here. You want the job?
Yes. Thank you, Commander.
-- Yevir brings Kira and Raiq to Janir (11x06)
Novice Kira, Raiq, welcome to the
Oralian Temple at Janir.
Nerys, you came. That’s wonderful.
You also know this woman, Kira?
She used to be with the pagh-
wraith cult. Last I heard she’d
joined the Ohalavaru. Are you
an Oralian now, Mika?
In fact, I still follow Ohalu. But
Vedek Yevir asked for my help,
and I saw no reason why we
couldn’t work together.
-- Kira and Ro talk in the runabout (11x15)
I’m not here to take command
from you. I’m only here to watch
out for Raiq.
I killed her entire race, Laren.
That’s on me.
-- Ro reveals the secret ship to Raiq (11x14)
We found a message... from
another Ascendant. You’re not
the only one, Raiq.
-- On the Black World, Raiq and Vexh meet (11x15)
It is a great relief to see you.
It is good to see you too, my
brother. I am Raiq.
I am Vexh.
-- The meridian destroys Vexh’s ship, he screams (11x15)
-- Jake interviewing Kai Solis (11x14)
It’s been a difficult time for the
church on Bajor.
-- The flashback to the Ohalu protest in the shrine, including Luka and Mika (11x06 “Two Steps Forward”)
(v.o. from 11x14)
Obviously there’s the Ohalu
-- The fistfight in the shrine, with Cenn and Evik (11x09)
...but now the Oralian Way...
-- The Bajorans at B’Hala reacting to the arrival of Raiq (11x19 “Gratitude”)
...and Raiq the Ascendant.
-- Back to the interview (11x14)
We must be wary of turning those
passions against each other.
-- Vedek Bellis in the Assembly chamber (11x14)
My followers and I call for a vote
of no confidence in Kai Solis’s
ability to lead Bajor.
-- Evik watches the results of the vote with relief (11x15)
It’s a landslide result. Almost
eighty per cent of Bajor voted...
in favour of Kai Solis.
-- A mugshot of Luka, clearly taken in DS9 security (11x06)
(v.o. from 11x06)
His name is Luka Tirem.
He’s an Ohalavar.
Rather an extreme one.
-- Sisko is introduced to Luka at B’Hala (11x11 “Vigil”)
Emissary, please meet Luka Tirem.
Captain Sisko. A pleasure to meet
-- A phaser shoots at Garak outside the shrine (11x06)
(v.o. from 11x11)
The Cardassian ambassador. The
stupidest thing I’ve ever done.
-- Sisko grabs Luka, Luka freaks out (11x11)
Did you kill Prylar Eivos?
Please don’t hurt me please don’t
hurt me please don’t hurt me...
-- Sisko and Kasidy’s argument, MOS (11x11)
You’re a good man too, Benjamin.
At least one person forgives me.
-- Pif and Sett nuzzle romantically (11x08 “Puppy Love”)
-- Hetik kisses Candlewood in the corridor outside the airlock (11x16 “Unleashed”)
-- Sisko and Kasidy reconcile with a big hug (11x19)
-- Ro kisses Quark in Pif’s quarters (11x08)
-- Ro punches Quark in security (11x17 “Whistleblower”)
Commander, you have to stop –
He betrayed me, Major! He betrayed
all of us... but especially me.
I’m Quark’s contact. I’m the one
who gave him the information about
the Ascendant ship... It was me.
-- Lenaris on the screen with Ro (11x17)
You have put the lives I protect
at risk. And I have no problem
embarrassing Starfleet publicly
because of it.
So now what? I’m supposed to throw
myself on my sword, beg for mercy?
You’re supposed to get rid of the
-- Luka grabs Rebecca and drags her off (11x19)
(v.o. from 11x21)
Luka Tirem has kidnapped the
daughter of the Emissary...
-- Luka sits in the pilot’s seat of Axno’s ship, trying to get it to work (11x20 “Fugitive”)
...taken the deadly Ascendant ship
kept in hiding by Starfleet...
-- Luka-Axno fires on the patrol vessels (11x21 “Inferno”)
...and attacked and killed several
-- Luka-Axno jumps in and fires on Deep Space Nine (11x21)
He’s going to attack the station.
-- The runabouts escape. The station EXPLODES... (11x21)
And now, the conclusion.
2 INT. DEFIANT – BRIDGE
RO and the rest flinch back, covering their eyes from the flash. When they look back at the main viewscreen again...
...there’s nothing but tumbling debris. Deep Space Nine has been destroyed.
CONTINUING the scene...
Ro turns to the other officers, watching the screen beside her... and she GRINS.
Good thing that wasn’t the real
Deep Space Nine, huh?
END OF TEASER
|July 4 2015, 08:19 AM||#3|
Re: DS9 11x22 - "Penitence" SEASON FINALE!
3 EXT. SPACE
The Defiant and Axno’s Ascendant vessel both hold position, in silhouette against the star. We have gone back in time.
4 INT. DEFIANT – BRIDGE
We begin back at the earlier scene. Ro has just figured out Luka-Axno’s next move, to her horror. PRYNN, NOG, BOWERS, CANDLEWOOD and MATTHIAS are with her.
He’s going to attack the station.
That’s his next target.
Continuing the scene. As the others absorb that...
Well, we obviously can’t let that
So what do we do?
Attack the station. Attack Deep
Space Nine. How do we get out
of that? Think, people!
Trick him somehow? Make him go
after something else instead?
It was certainly a trick last time.
Just a fake holo-station. But I
don’t thing holograms are going
to fool an Ascendant ship.
Inspiration hits. Ro stops pacing, and grins. She’s got it.
But we don’t need a hologram.
We have something better.
As the others wonder what she’s going on about, she starts delivering orders, top speed.
John - that ship absorbs power
from everything around it, right?
Right. In fact, I’ve been thinking
that what looks like a lot of random
jumping about might be the ship
detecting power sources.
So what would happen if there
were no power sources?
It... wouldn’t know where to go.
Ro smiles. That was apparently the right answer.
Nog, how long would it take you
to set up Empok Nor to send out a
power signature the size of Deep
Commander, Empok Nor is dead.
No power core, no nothing. It can’t
be brought back to full power.
Then fake it.
Exactly. Just enough to lure him
in, get him where we want him.
Umm... I don’t know... three
Take every available body you can
spare, and get it done.
Commander, no matter where he is,
we can’t fire on him while he’s still
Don’t worry, I’ve got an idea for
that too. Sam - assuming Rebecca
is not an issue, do we have the
firepower to take this ship out
in our current condition?
Just barely. I wouldn’t mind a
couple dozen more ships, though.
I can think of someone who might
be willing to help us.
Prynn looks meaningfully to Ro. A moment... Ro gets it.
I can too.
And we catch back up to STOCK MATERIAL from 11x21. There’s an ALARM from Bowers’ tactical console. He runs to check it. His eyes flare in alarm, looks back to Ro...
Luka’s charging up to jump...
Everyone back to your posts. Red
alert, battle stations. Matthias,
contact DS-Nine. Nog, get down
to engineering and grab whatever
you need. Everyone, move!
The crew rush back to their stations. Nog exits the bridge. The ship goes to RED ALERT. On screen, Luka-Axno turns to a threatening position, the ship’s silver tip glowing red...
And he FIRES, right down Defiant’s throat.
5 INT. DS9 - QUARK’S BAR
Replaying the scene from 11x21. The broadcast from Janir has been playing on the screens. But they all go blank, as RED ALERT lights flash all around the station.
Major Cenn to all hands. Level one
emergency is in effect. This is not
a drill. All hands report to your
supervisors for orders.
QUARK looks in fear over towards Lt Cmdr EVIK, who has been standing and watching by the window out onto the Promenade. It’s exactly what Quark feared would happen. Evik nods, then turns and heads directly for the security office.
All around the bar, Starfleet officers - ones who didn’t already leave for the Defiant – immediately head out. In a matter of seconds, only civilians are left, wondering what the hell is going on while the red alert lights flash.
I repeat, this is not a drill, all
hands report to supervisors. Now.
MORN, TREIR, HETIK and PIF all gather back together at the bar, surrounding Quark. This is it.
6 INT. DS9 - SECURITY OFFICE
Evik enters the room, moves with purpose into his seat and immediately calls up a connection to Ops. His personal screen changes to show CENN.
Major. What’s going on?
Commander Ro has a plan to stop
Luka. But she needs our help.
Off Evik’s curious reaction to that...
7 EXT. DEEP SPACE NINE
On the habitat ring of the station, all three runabout pads rise and lock into position. In quick succession, all three runabouts - the Rio Grande, the Brahmaputra, the Nile - launch and head off quickly in the same direction.
The moment they’ve gone, the station starts shutting down. The main power core goes dark. Lights start going out all over the station. One by one, all the sections of the station turn to powerless darkness.
8 INT. DS9 - QUARK’S BAR
In the bar, Quark looks up in annoyance as the power goes out bit by bit all around him.
Oh for... Not this again!
He grabs another FLARE from behind his bar, and CRACKS it open until it burns to life with an eerie green glow. Then he steps out towards the door to the Promenade...
...where Evik is already walking back towards him.
Lieutenant Commander Evik! What
is going on? I thought we got rid of
that damned electronic dog thing!
We did, Ambassador. But this is
deliberate. We need to shut down
the station so we present as small
a power signature as possible. I’m
assigning my officers to keep the
civilians safe and calm, but these
people are your responsibility.
I understand, Commander.
Quark grasps that this is clearly serious. As Evik leaves, and the lights continue to die out, Quark turns to his few remaining customers and staff.
Everyone - please stay calm. We’re
going to be without power for a
while. So please stay in plain
sight, and I’ll take care of you.
Morn is about to raise his stein of beer and launch into a rollicking sing-song, but Quark stops him.
Morn, I get the feeling this is no
time for a Lurian drinking song.
The people begin to gather in the centre of the room...
9 INT. DS9 - MAIN OPS CENTRE
Major Cenn stands at the central Ops table, in command of a crew of extras, as the station’s power dies around him.
Prophets protect us. I hope your
plan works, Ro, because without
any power or any runabouts...
we’re completely defenceless.
He breathes deeply as Ops sinks into darkness around him.
10 EXT. SPACE
The Defiant is moving at full impulse.
11 INT. DEFIANT – BRIDGE
Ro is in the command seat, Prynn at helm, Candlewood at sciences, Bowers at tactical, Matthias at ops.
Tenmei - set a course direct for
Empok Nor, a split-second fly-by.
Bowers - drop the shields for
point-six-two seconds at the apex
of Tenmei’s flight plan. John,
start the beam cycle two-point-
three seconds before the apex.
Ro to Nog, are you ready?
We’re ready, Commander.
Good luck. Prynn?
Prynn hits her controls...
12 EXT. SPACE
The Defiant heads straight for Empok Nor at top speed, the dead station in orbit of the blue gas giant Cajara.
13 INT. DEFIANT – BRIDGE
Candlewood starts the transport cycle...
Bowers drops the shields...
14 INT. DEFIANT - TRANSPORTER ROOM
Nog and five other engineers including LEISHMAN disappear in transporter beams, carrying heavy boxes of equipment...
15 EXT. EMPOK NOR
The Defiant loops around at the last second...
16 INT. EMPOK NOR - CORRIDOR
Nog and his engineers TRANSPORT into a corridor.
Okay, everyone get to work!
They move quickly to do exactly that.
17 EXT. SPACE
The Defiant zooms away again, heading away from Empok Nor.
18 INT. DEFIANT – BRIDGE
Ro sits in the command chair.
Prynn, find me new coordinates. We
need to give Nog as much time as
we can. I just hope the rest of the
plan goes as easily as this.
Off Ro’s determined yet worried face...
19 INT. JANIR MONASTERY - RAIQ’S QUARTERS
There’s a sharp and urgent KNOCK at the door. RAIQ opens it, to find KIRA there in the doorway.
Raiq... we need your help.
Off Raiq’s uncertain reaction to that...
END OF ACT ONE
|July 4 2015, 08:32 AM||#4|
Re: DS9 11x22 - "Penitence" SEASON FINALE!
20 EXT. ENDALLA SURFACE
The rocky, scrub-surfaced moon, with its destroyed Bajoran patrol vessels and intact Starfleet shuttlecraft Cooper.
21 INT. SHUTTLECRAFT COOPER
As seen in 11x03 and 11x17. Ensign ALECO sits in the pilot seat, wincing from his shrapnel-wounded leg but fighting past it determinedly, preparing the shuttle for launch.
BASHIR appears in the open hatchway and looks in, unhappy.
Ensign Aleco? What the hell do you
think you’re doing?
They need someone to go to Bajor
and pick up some passengers. I’m
the closest, so I volunteered.
You’re still wounded. You’re in no
shape to go anywhere.
Doctor, I let Luka get past me.
It’s because of me that he has
that ship, and Captain Sisko’s
daughter with him. If they need
my help, I’m going to give it.
There’s plenty of blame to go
around, Ensign. At least let me
give you a booster shot.
Bashir fishes in his medical bag, finds a hypo, steps up to Aleco and injects him in the neck. Aleco breathes deeply as the painkiller runs through him.
Thanks, Doctor. Now go. Others
need you more than me.
Bashir nods reluctantly, and steps out of the shuttle. The hatch closes, and Aleco makes the final few preparations.
22 EXT. ENDALLA SURFACE
Bashir steps back, and watches as the tiny shuttle lifts off and zooms away into the sky.
23 INT. ENDALLA CAVERNS
SISKO is crouched down, moving rocks one at a time from where they fell. The rocks are blocking the passage, but as he moves them, they reveal more and more of the damaged, crushed body of Corporal RENTA. Finally his head is clear, twisted and glaring with dead eyes. Sisko stares balefully.
I don’t even know who you are.
But I am so sorry. This is all my
fault. Luka... he was my friend.
24 INT. ASCENDANT SHIP
LUKA sits in the pilot’s seat of Axno’s ship, cocooned in the silver blood of the Ascendants. The console before him is RED, and he grins manically as the ship FIRES bolts of lightning. Behind him, REBECCA cowers in the corner.
LUKA / AXNO
Watch them run from us, Rebecca.
I’ll make them all pay. Bajorans.
Cardassians. Eav’oq. Heretics!
And they will die and burn for it.
He stops firing and pauses, reaching the ship’s senses out.
LUKA / AXNO
But the temple to blasphemy, that
monstrous space station... where
is it? I cannot see it.
In frustration, he fires the ship’s weapons again.
25 EXT. SPACE
Now we see the target of his fire - a Bajoran civilian transport ship. The ship’s hull begins to peel away...
26 INT. DEFIANT – BRIDGE
Ro holds tight to her armrests, as the screen shows the attack progressing...
Block that shot!
Prynn drives the ship on, right between the ships...
27 EXT. SPACE
The Defiant swoops into the path of the Ascendant ship, taking the brunt of the lightning bolt. Tiny explosions fill the air around the ship. Bits of the ablative armour peel away, revealing bare hull underneath.
Annoyed, Luka-Axno JUMPS away again.
28 INT. DEFIANT – BRIDGE
STOCK MATERIAL from 11x21. Panels all over the bridge are blasted and burned, wires hanging, cables sparking, gases hissing. Everyone stays at their stations and keeps working, fighting to keep the ship alive.
Continuing the scene. Ro is in the command chair, battered and bloodied. She turns to Matthias...
Do they have life support?
Yes! They’re alive.
Okay. Prynn, new coordinates!
27 EXT. SPACE - BAJOR ORBIT
The shuttlecraft Cooper zooms towards the planet’s surface.
28 EXT. BAJOR - JANIR MONASTERY
The small monastery tucked away in the hills near the winding river. The Cooper flies into the valley...
ALECO (comm, v.o.)
Aleco to Kira.
KIRA (comm, v.o.)
Ready when you are, Ensign.
29 INT. SHUTTLECRAFT COOPER
TRANSPORTER signals form in the rear of the cramped cabin, depositing Kira and Raiq. Kira immediately moves to take the co-pilot seat while Raiq hovers at the back.
Empok Nor, as fast as you can.
30 INT. EMPOK NOR - CORRIDOR
Nog and LEISHMAN are both wrist deep in machines, working side by side as fast as they can move. Other engineers are dotted along the corridor, all working by temporary lights.
Still think we’re all about to die,
More than ever. But I don’t get
it. We’re just setting up lights
and sensor shadows. That’s not
enough to fake a power signature
the size of Deep Space Nine.
Nope, it’s not. But somebody else
is taking care of that.
31 EXT. SPACE
The Cooper zooms towards the still-dark Empok Nor...
32 INT. SHUTTLECRAFT COOPER
As Empok Nor grows in the front window, Kira turns to Raiq.
You’re sure you’re strong enough
to do this?
I am strong as I have ever been.
Bleat at me no longer, woman.
What about your connection to the
ship? You said you couldn’t affect
what it did, only watch.
Raiq is unsure about this one, but fakes confidence.
I will complete this Quest, Kira.
Approaching Empok Nor now.
Raiq stands straight, moves to the rear of the shuttle, and casts the FORCEFIELD around herself.
As she stands there surrounded by the bubble of energy, Kira works her panels.
With one last look of concern to Raiq, Kira presses one last control. Raiq disappears in a TRANSPORTER beam...
33 INT. EMPOK NOR
...and rematerializes inside a dead and blackened area of Empok Nor, still surrounded by her forcefield. As she steadies her nerves for the task ahead, we PULL BACK...
She is standing on a platform that opens out onto a huge open space inside the station. What used to house the power core, it is now a vacant chasm inside the station’s body.
Raiq is stood on the lowest level of this.
We continue to PULL BACK until we realise that we are...
34 EXT. EMPOK NOR
...OPEN TO SPACE, in the very lowest part of the station’s central core.
Raiq looks out at the stars and the lower pylons, protected only by her forcefield. She watches as the Cooper zooms away, leaving her behind.
35 INT. EMPOK NOR - CORRIDOR
Nog slots one last piece into place, and stands up. He looks down both directions of the corridor, shouts out.
Okay, here goes nothing. Nog to
36 INT. DEFIANT – BRIDGE
Ro in the centre seat...
We’re as ready as we can be here,
Aleco just called - the rest of the
plan is in place. Stand by. Bowers,
any sign of our backup?
Not yet, sir. But every second we
wait is another second Rebecca
is in danger.
Alright, then I guess we do this
without them. Tenmei - set course
for Empok Nor. Nog, set it off and
then get the hell out of there.
37 INT. EMPOK NOR - CORRIDOR
You heard the lady. Everyone out!
All the other engineers stand, tap their combadges, and TRANSPORT away. Leishman stays with him, and together they move to one last lever, preparing to push it.
...LEVITATES off her ledge and out into the cavernous space at the bottom of Empok Nor, surrounded by her forcefield.
Hovering in space, Raiq manoeuvres until she is floating directly where the power core should be. She raises her hands, looks up into the open cavity of the station. Her hands burst into FLAMES. She prepares herself...
...and the flames EXPLODE into a massive column of fire, shooting up into the body of the station.
39 INT. EMPOK NOR - CORRIDOR
Nog and Leishman press the last lever together. Then they tap their combadges and TRANSPORT away.
40 EXT. EMPOK NOR
The formerly dead Empok Nor POWERS UP, lights appearing in all the windows, life bursting into every corner of the station. And Raiq, being the power core.
41 INT. ASCENDANT SHIP
A wash of GREEN floods Luka’s console. He reacts with glee.
LUKA / AXNO
The mid-air hologram returns, revealing a scratchy image of what looks through static like a powered Deep Space Nine.
A nasty grin grows on his face. The interior of the ship glows WHITE, and he JUMPS away in a flash.
42 EXT. EMPOK NOR
STOCK MATERIAL from 11x21. At the top of the station, looking down on the Ops dome and the Promenade...
And Luka-Axno JUMPS into position, right on top of the station. The pointed tip glows an angry red...
And he FIRES. The bolt of lightning hits the Ops dome. Electric charges skitter and fizzle all over the outer hull, dissolving the metal, spreading gradually down.
Concentrating as hard as she can, casting the flames up into the core of the station. She mutters to herself...
My vessel - I feel you near. Do
you feel me? Bring me home.
44 EXT. EMPOK NOR
STOCK MATERIAL from 11x21. Ops disintegrates into chunks. Luka-Axno doesn’t stop firing. The crumbling continues down the neck of the station, reaching the Promenade.
All three runabouts launch and escape. Just in time - the crumbling spreads out across the crossover bridges to the habitat ring.
45 INT. RUNABOUT - COCKPIT
Nog and Leishman at the helm of the runabout, with a group of engineers gathered all together at the back.
I am going...
46 EXT. EMPOK NOR
Starting at the core and spreading outward, the entire station DISSOLVES, chunks of metal tumbling away into space. Small EXPLOSIONS swallow up many of the pieces.
47 INT. ASCENDANT SHIP
Inside the ship, Luka-Axno is concentrating on firing, a wash of RED filling the console and spreading to the rest of the ship. He LAUGHS maniacally, fully enjoying the massive destruction he is causing.
Behind him, unnoticed, Rebecca sits by the back wall. By her side, a new Wa patch is forming... BLACK.
Rebecca reaches out to touch it again, thinking maybe it will get her out like the purple patch did. Her fingers swim into the colour, and the entire back wall begins to WAVER, becoming fluid, watery, translucent.
Focusing hard on her forcefield and the flames, she feels the power of the ship flowing into her...
Suddenly she feels PULLED, yanked backwards. The forcefield dissolves, the flames die, and Raiq DISAPPEARS as if sucked through the fabric of space itself.
49 INT. ASCENDANT SHIP
And Raiq FALLS out of the wavery back wall of the Ascendant ship, staggering onto the deck. Rebecca looks up at the newcomer, recognizing her.
In the pilot seat, Luka-Axno recognizes her too.
LUKA / AXNO
Raiq, my sister...
The RED colour washes away from the console, replaced by a spreading wash of WHITE. The ship ramps up to jump...
50 EXT. EMPOK NOR
STOCK MATERIAL from 11x21. Luka-Axno stops firing and JUMPS away. Just in time, because...
Empok Nor finally EXPLODES in one great massive fireball.
51 INT. DEFIANT – BRIDGE
STOCK MATERIAL from 11x21. Ro and the rest flinch back, covering their eyes from the flash of the explosion.
52 EXT. SPACE
The Ascendant ship JUMPS back into open space...
53 INT. ASCENDANT SHIP
Raiq is just orienting herself, feeling the blush of home at being back in an Ascendant ship again...
Rebecca is cowering in the corner...
A ball of FLAMES bursts into life, wafting away to reveal Luka himself - a hologram of his normal Bajoran appearance, stood beside his Ascendant-cocooned physical body.
He smiles, thrilled to see Raiq.
LUKA / AXNO
My sister, Raiq. Archquester of
the Ascendancy. I had faith that
you would return, that you would
hold to the burning light of the
Join me now, my sister... and
together, we will destroy the
Bajorans once and for all.
Off Luka’s manic grin, and Raiq’s uncertain reaction...
END OF ACT TWO
|July 4 2015, 09:04 AM||#5|
Re: DS9 11x22 - "Penitence" SEASON FINALE!
54 INT. ASCENDANT SHIP
Picking up where we left off. We have now caught up with real time, as at the end of 11x21. Raiq stands against the back wall, Rebecca cowering by her side, facing a hologram of Luka. Luka’s real body remains cocooned in silver.
LUKA / AXNO
Join me, my sister!
I did not come for you. I came
for the child.
LUKA / AXNO
I know you better than that. We
are the same, you and I. You long
to annihilate these sinners and
blasphemers by my side. It is
what you were born to do!
Raiq hesitates to answer for just that moment too long.
LUKA / AXNO
You see? You do not deny it.
The Quest is over. The Ascension
LUKA / AXNO
The Quest is never over! It is our
life! Why else would you come?
I came for Kira. For Sisko.
Benjamin... My friend...
Yes, and you have betrayed him.
You took his young.
LUKA / AXNO
She is Ohalu’s Avatar! She is the
proof that we are right!
No! I saw as the True see, and this
is not their wish.
Listen to me, Luka. Stop this. You
are correct – I do long for the fire
and the glory of the Quest. But
that is past. Though it be difficult,
we must go forward.
LUKA / AXNO
Forward to what? To a world where
heresy is tolerated, celebrated?
I no longer believe it is heresy.
It is only... different.
LUKA / AXNO
Then you have betrayed us. You are
as much a heretic as any of them.
You will die and burn with them.
Perhaps. But the child will not.
Quickly, Raiq scoops up Rebecca, turns and LEAPS back through the wavery rear wall. They both disappear. Enraged, Luka bursts into FLAMES, wafting away the hologram image.
In his silver cocoon, Luka-Axno ROARS with fury. The ship’s interior glows WHITE... and he JUMPS.
55 EXT. SPACE
Luka JUMPS back into open space, instantly FIRING in jagged bolts of lightning, not caring who or what at. The ship tumbles out of control, and then JUMPS away again.
Elsewhere, he JUMPS in again, firing randomly, pulsating with energy and anger. He spins and loops and tumbles, then JUMPS away again.
56 INT. ASCENDANT SHIP
JUMPing back in, Luka-Axno screams with rage. Both the man and the ship are furious, and they’re letting it out in destructive BOLTS of electricity.
LUKA / AXNO
He JUMPS again...
57 INT. DEFIANT – BRIDGE
Ro leans over Candlewood’s shoulder, watches the constantly changing readouts on his console. They show Luka jumping in, firing randomly, then jumping out again. Jumping in somewhere else, firing randomly, jumping out again.
What the hell is he doing?
He seems to be just jumping around
Does he still have Rebecca? Did
Raiq get her out of there?
I can’t get a solid reading. He’s
moving too fast.
Defiant to Cooper. Please respond.
58 EXT. ENDALLA SURFACE
Bashir, Aleco and Kira stand on the surface of the moon, next to the grounded shuttle craft.
This is Bashir. Go ahead.
Doctor, did it work? Is Rebecca
there? Is she safe?
Stand by, Commander.
He quickly grabs a tricorder and activates it. Scanning...
Alright, we have two Bajorans and
a human right here... and one
human in the caverns...
Bashir keeps scanning. He looks back to Kira, worried...
59 INT. DEFIANT – BRIDGE
Ro waits anxiously for the results of Bashir’s scan, standing on the half-ruined bridge of the Defiant...
60 INT. ENDALLA CAVERNS
The open space where the ship was hidden. The entrance remains blocked by rockfall. The air splits open...
...and Raiq LEAPS through, carrying Rebecca in her arms.
61 EXT. ENDALLA SURFACE
Bashir picks up the new readings on his tricorder...
Yes! One Ascendant adult and one
human child. She’s safe.
62 INT. DEFIANT – BRIDGE
Fortified with success, Ro returns to her command seat.
Bowers – weapons free.
And they get back to work, eager and re-energized.
63 EXT. SPACE
The Defiant, looking damaged and patchy, nevertheless turns and surges back into battle.
64 EXT. DEEP SPACE NINE
Sitting in complete darkness, no power.
65 INT. DS9 - QUARK’S BAR
A CRACK and a FIZZ, and another green FLARE comes to life in Quark’s hands. He carries it over from the bar to the small group gathered in the centre, sat huddled together in the dark. Treir, Hetik, Morn, Pif and his puppies.
Any news from Evik?
Not a word. They can’t even turn
on the passive sensors.
So he could be about to blow us
to pieces, and we’d never know.
Trust me. Not knowing is better.
Will you all stop talking so loud?
I really don’t think he can hear
The children can hear you. You’ll
Treir smiles – he called them ‘children’. Quark reaches out for TIFF the puppy, picks him up gently, holds him close.
You stay safe where I can see you,
I will, uncle Quark.
Sorry. I just hope they’re safe.
You think I don’t? I have family
out there. And... and friends.
We all hope they’re safe, Hetik.
Hetik nods, and they go back to silent waiting in the dark.
66 INT. ENDALLA CAVERNS
Kira runs through the passage, reaching Sisko at his slowly diminishing wall of rocks. She sees the crushed body of Corporal Renta moved to the side, laid out as respectfully as possible in the circumstances.
Benjamin! It worked – she’s safe.
Raiq rescued Rebecca. They’re in
there right now.
Sisko is relieved, but he still has to get to his daughter.
Kira digs in, helping Sisko to get the rocks moved faster.
67 INT. BAJORAN MILITIA CENTRAL
The hub of activity of Bajor’s planetary police. LENARIS and KASIDY stand together, watching developments on the big incident screen, awaiting news. An ALERT – Lenaris checks.
Starfleet reports that your
daughter is safe, ma’am. And in
fact, they credit the Ascendant
woman Raiq with her rescue.
I guess she really is on our side
now, like she said.
It also means that the Defiant is
now free to attack and destroy
that damned ship.
And the man inside it.
Tell them not to show any mercy.
I want that bastard dead.
How would you feel, General, if it
was your child he’d taken?
My children were killed by the
And didn’t you want to punish them?
Perhaps, once. At the time. But we
I can move forward when he’s dead.
This is a new look on Kasidy. A mother defending her child. Intimidated, reluctant, Lenaris nevertheless goes to pass on the message.
68 EXT. SPACE
The Defiant lets loose with its PULSE PHASERS, pummelling at the Ascendant ship.
Only the first punch actually hits, knocking the ship off its axis. After that the ship JUMPS away again, and the rest of the Defiant’s shots go spare.
69 INT. DEFIANT – BRIDGE
Prynn at helm, seeing the ship disappear before her eyes on the main viewscreen.
It’s no good being free to shoot
if you can’t hit the damn thing.
New co-ordinates! Fire again!
It’s no use, sir. He’s moving too
fast. There’s no way to catch up.
Just watch me.
And she turns the ship again, renewing her attack...
70 EXT. SPACE
The Defiant surges forward, pulse phasers firing. Luka-Axno JUMPS away again.
71 INT. DEFIANT – BRIDGE
Prynn thumps her burned console in frustration.
Ro sits in her command seat, wondering what she can do. But then there’s a new ALERT. Matthias checks it, and grins.
Commander - our backup’s here.
72 EXT. SPACE
Luka-Axno JUMPS into open space again, skidding sideways...
The USS James T Kirk comes surging in, phasers blasting.
73 INT. ASCENDANT SHIP
The phasers HIT one of the ship’s bladelike wings. The ship CONVULSES in pain, and Luka SCREAMS, panicked.
LUKA / AXNO
Gotta go gotta go gotta go...
And he JUMPS away again.
74 INT. DEFIANT – BRIDGE
Ro in the centre seat, victorious...
The viewscreen changes to show Captain VAUGHN in command on an Akira-class bridge, firm and determined.
My apologies for the delay,
Commander. A little trouble with
Just glad you could join the
Is Rebecca safe?
Yes, sir. Raiq saved her, took her
back to Endalla. She’s there with
Sisko and Kira now.
Raiq? Raiq saved her?
That’s right, sir. So we might be
able to finally finish this thing
once and for all.
Vaughn nods, pondering this information.
75 INT. ENDALLA CAVERNS
Sisko and Kira move the last of the fallen rocks, enough for them both to clamber through the hole and into the larger open space where the ship was hidden.
Struggling through, they both see Raiq standing there, holding Rebecca by the arm.
Rebecca tries to immediately run to her daddy... but Raiq won’t let her go. Her lithe silver hand grips tight onto the tiny brown arm.
Raiq, what are you doing? It’s
over – you can let her go now.
Raiq pulls Rebecca in tight, wraps a hand around the little girl’s throat. Rebecca struggles against her. Raiq sneers at Sisko and Kira with anger, and the hand begins to GLOW.
No. I will not.
END OF ACT THREE
|July 4 2015, 09:15 AM||#6|
Re: DS9 11x22 - "Penitence" SEASON FINALE!
76 EXT. SPACE
The Akira-class USS Kirk at momentary rest...
77 INT. KIRK - BRIDGE
As seen briefly in 11x14 “No Confidence”. Vaughn stands from his command chair, turns to his first officer ROGEIRO – an olive-skinned man with a pronounced Portuguese accent.
It is irregular for the captain to
leave the bridge during a combat
I’m afraid this is a personal
matter, Commander. I need to
be sure it’s resolved. Helm – set
course for a split-second fly-by
of Endalla. Tactical - drop the
shields for point-six-two seconds
at the apex of the flight plan.
Ops, begin transport two-point-
three seconds before the apex.
An interesting strategy, sir.
I learned from the best. Commander
Rogeiro, you have the bridge. Co-
ordinate with Commander Ro of
the Defiant, but follow her lead.
This is her territory, in more ways
than one. Helm - engage.
A VULCAN WOMAN at the helm sets the ship on its course.
78 EXT. SPACE
With the moon of Endalla in the distance, the Kirk zooms off towards it.
79 INT. ENDALLA CAVERNS
Vaughn TRANSPORTS into the caverns, by the side of Kira and Sisko, a happy and welcoming smile on his face...
...which instantly drops when he sees Raiq, her burning hand around Rebecca’s throat, Kira and Sisko holding back.
Ben? Nerys? What’s going on?
Raiq recognizes him... and hisses in fury.
I was told you saved Rebecca.
Kira asked. Demanded. I did as she
said, as I thought the True wanted
of me. As I have always done.
Then what are you doing now?
I am demonstrating the error of
Raiq... please... don’t...
Off Raiq, struggling between anger and confusion...
80 INT. DEFIANT – BRIDGE
Ro on the bridge, talking to Cmdr Rogeiro on the Kirk’s bridge, via the viewscreen. Meanwhile, Candlewood has his head down, working hard at his consoles.
What is your plan, Commander?
Right now, I don’t have one. I
exhausted my plan-making skills
with Empok Nor. I’m hoping two
heads are better than one.
Candlewood’s hand shoots up, as if he’s in school.
Commanders! I have an idea.
(to Rogeiro, explaining)
Lieutenant Candlewood, my chief
Go ahead, John.
We thought the jumping was random
before, and it wasn’t. And I think
it’s still not random.
You found a pattern, Lieutenant?
If I’m right, we can calculate his
next jump. And be there waiting.
As Ro and Rogeiro ponder this...
81 INT. ENDALLA CAVERNS
The stand-off continues. Raiq holds Rebecca by the throat. Kira, Sisko and Vaughn stand back, facing her. With one hand holding Rebecca, the other points at Vaughn.
You! And those who wear the same
weak cloth. Since I came to this
world, you have all treated me as
if I were still your enemy.
You lied about the vessel. You hid
the knowledge that I was not the
last of my kind.
Well, what do you expect? You led
the crusade to exterminate these
people. I was protecting them.
That is past. The True have shown
me we are to be friends now. All
brothers and sisters in the True.
Be fair, Raiq. How was he supposed
to know that?
Just let Rebecca go. If you want
someone to blame, take me. Maybe
I even deserve it.
(sotto, to Vaughn)
I beg forgiveness.
Say it. It’s traditional.
Vaughn takes a deep breath, turns back to Raiq.
I beg forgiveness.
I do not grant it.
Off everyone’s reaction to that...
82 INT. DEFIANT – BRIDGE
Ro conferring with Candlewood, then turning to Rogeiro...
We’re sending you the coordinates
now. When he next jumps in, we’ll
be there. When he jumps out again,
you’ll be there one step ahead.
Then, we’ll be two steps ahead.
What’s your first name, Commander?
I beg your pardon?
Anxo. It means ‘angel’ in Portuguese.
Why, does it matter?
No, just... Never mind. Well, Anxo
Rogeiro. I’m Laren. What do you
say we kill this thing?
I will follow your lead... Laren.
The screen returns to the stars, and the crew gets to work.
83 INT. ENDALLA CAVERNS
Continuing the stand-off...
Look, Raiq, I’m sorry for hiding
things from you. But you were on
a mission from your gods to kill
everyone I care about.
You insult my faith! The True want
only peace now, and I have worked
tirelessly to mould that truth into
So what was I supposed to do?
You should have trusted me, as
Kira did. She understood, as we
both struggled to reconcile what
we have always known of them
with what they want of us now.
But you did not want peace. You
wanted fear and mistrust.
Raiq, listen to me. You’re right.
We need to move forward. We’ve
come so far, all of us. You saved
the Emissary’s daughter – that’s
going to put all of Bajor on your
side. Don’t spoil it now. Let her
go. It’s what the Prophets... it’s
what the True would want.
Please, Raiq. I’m sorry. Don’t let
my mistake ruin everything.
Raiq struggles... and with a roar of frustration, lets go of Rebecca. The little girl immediately runs to Sisko, grabbing him around the waist like she’ll never let go.
Everyone stands down the tension. Hanging her head in shame, Raiq looks sadly towards Sisko and Rebecca.
I beg forgiveness... Emissary.
I grant it, Raiq.
But Sisko’s face is still like thunder.
84 INT. DEFIANT – BRIDGE
Everyone waits on edge for Luka to appear. Eyes on the screen, fingers on triggers. Prynn hesitates, turns to Ro.
Sir, I’m not sure about this.
I know what you mean. Luka, he’s
almost an innocent in this. He
suffered brain damage from being
beaten and abused. And now he’s
under the influence of that ship.
Exactly! I’m not saying he didn’t
do anything wrong. He kidnapped
Rebecca, he killed people. But
maybe he wasn’t in his right mind.
But there’s no way to know that
without getting him out of the ship.
From everything I’ve been able to
figure out, that won’t happen.
He’s bonded to it now.
Still, sitting in wait so we can
shoot him down, without any
trial or defence... it feels like an
execution. Is that what we do?
Ro sits back to ponder this for a moment.
It’s not our decision to make. Ro
to Bashir. Is Sisko with you?
85 INT. ENDALLA CAVERNS
Bashir is just clambering past the rockfall and into the larger cavern. He goes straight to Sisko.
Captain, it’s Ro on the Defiant.
Go ahead, Commander.
Sir, we’re in position to destroy
the Ascendant ship and its pilot.
I believe it’s your call as to
whether we take the final shot.
Everyone overhears this. Sisko, cradling a shaken Rebecca. Kira, sitting and comforting Raiq. Vaughn, standing alone.
Sisko hesitates. He looks back and forth between Bashir and Kira and Vaughn, trying to get some sense of what he should do. Then he looks down at Rebecca, trembling in his arms.
Captain... do we fire first?
Yes. Kill him.
...Understood, sir. Defiant out.
Everyone accepts the decision silently, if not happily.
86 EXT. SPACE
Luka-Axno JUMPS into space, on the run and panicked...
87 INT. DEFIANT – BRIDGE
Seeing this on the viewscreen, Ro is resolute.
Bowers presses his controls...
88 EXT. SPACE
The Defiant lets loose with its punishing pulse-phasers...
The Ascendant ship takes the hits, crumpling from the damage, warping out of shape.
The Kirk comes flying in from another angle, joining the attack on Luka-Axno...
89 INT. ASCENDANT SHIP
Inside, the ship is going wild. Surfaces are bulging and warping. Electricity shocks across the consoles. The ship takes hit after hit after hit from the Starfleet phasers.
As the ship shrieks in its death throes, the silver blood flows away from Luka’s body, releasing him from its hold. When he’s finally free, he looks around in a panic.
Rebecca! Where are you sweetheart?
Rebecca? Please! I only wanted to
keep you safe...
And the ship finally can’t take any more. It OVERLOADS, the surfaces bursting, electricity crackling...
90 EXT. SPACE
The Ascendant ship EXPLODES...
91 INT. DEFIANT – BRIDGE
Ro and crew watch this on the screen, grim and resigned.
92 INT. ENDALLA CAVERNS
Raiq JERKS, gasping in pain as she feels the ship dying. Kira looks after her, Bashir runs to check on her.
Meanwhile Sisko watches, holding Rebecca, face like death.
END OF ACT FOUR
|July 4 2015, 09:29 AM||#7|
Re: DS9 11x22 - "Penitence" SEASON FINALE!
93 EXT. DEEP SPACE NINE
The station sits in its usual place, fully powered and lit up. The Defiant is docked, the James T Kirk is docked, freighters are docked. All is peaceful and normal.
Station log, stardate 56801.0,
Commander Ro Laren recording.
Everything is back to normal. Mostly.
94 INT. DS9 - MAIN OPS CENTRE
Ro stands outside her office, calmly watching the business of Ops go on. Cenn is at the Ops table, Bowers at tactical, extras elsewhere. She’s happy with her lot.
The station returned to full power
without incident, the Defiant is
under repair, and the crew are
settling back into their routine.
She strides confidently down to the table, checks something with Cenn MOS, approves, and then heads up the stairs again to the turbolift. It takes her away...
95 INT. DS9 - INFIRMARY
Rebecca sits sideways on a biobed as Bashir scans her all over. Sisko is right with her, not letting go. Kira and Raiq are both watching from a polite distance.
Rebecca Sisko is safe and
perfectly healthy. She and her
father have returned to Bajor,
along with Kira and Raiq.
The results are fine, and Sisko grabs Rebecca tight with relief. The little girl seems to be recovering nicely.
96 INT. DS9 - PROMENADE
The door from the Infirmary opens and Sisko, Rebecca, Kira and Raiq exit together, just in time to bump into Ro strolling along. They all exchange pleasantries MOS.
The crew of both the station and
the Defiant performed admirably
under difficult circumstances...
Ro crosses paths with Evik as he exits the security office. They nod acknowledgements, and she turns to enter Quark’s.
97 INT. DS9 - QUARK’S BAR
At a table in the middle, several junior officers sit together relaxing, including Prynn, Richter and Candlewood.
...and I think they all deserve a
little time to rest and relax.
Focusing on the junior officers now...
Are you serious? While the rest of
us were in the midst of a battle
for our lives?
Cross my heart. She did him right
in the Jeffries tube.
Candlewood CHOKES on his drink. Everyone else laughs. Suddenly they all hush though. Candlewood turns to see why... and sees that Nog has just entered the bar.
He sees them all sat together. He sees the smirks on their faces. He knows what they’ve been talking about. He blushes furiously, and turns and exits again. They all laugh more.
Candlewood turns again, and Hetik is standing there. John immediately stands and throws himself into Hetik’s arms.
Hey yourself. Oh John... thank
the Prophets you’re safe.
Um, excuse me – thank me I’m safe.
I’m the one who figured out the pattern.
I am, after all, awesome.
Hetik just chuckles and holds tight.
Back over at the bar, Ro leans against the bar while Quark and Treir serve. Nearby, Vaughn is just finishing up.
Well, it’s about time I was on my way.
This is your station now, not mine.
Thanks again for your help out there,
You never need to ask, Commander.
I’m always at your disposal.
Meanwhile, Quark works the consoles behind the bar, and a NEWS REPORT appears on all the screens around the room, featuring regular newsreader TIANA FEEN.
...as life in the Federation gets
back to normal...
The image on the screen changes to show the older human woman who was a candidate for president, NANIETTA BACCO.
...the former governor of Cestus
Three and newly elected Federation
President Nanietta Bacco settles
into her new offices on Earth.
98 INT. DS9 - PROMENADE
Elsewhere on the Promenade, Kira and Sisko have paused to watch the news report on another screen.
Meanwhile, closer to home, the
election has been overshadowed
by events concerning the Ohalavar
extremist Luka Tirem...
Kira looks to Sisko in sympathy. Rebecca seems fine, but Sisko is obviously not over it yet. Tiana continues...
...and the subsequent surprise
resignation of Kai Solis Tendren.
Kira’s jaw drops in sad shock. A video comes on the screen of Solis standing before the media.
My children, it is with a very heavy
heart that I do this.
99 INT. DS9 - MAIN OPS CENTRE
The video also plays in Ops, where Cenn watches gravely.
While the actions of Luka Tirem
were his alone, and I reject any
attempt to blame them upon my
fellow Ohalavaru, those actions
have nevertheless made my position
untenable. Someone must pay the
price, and I would rather that
someone be me than my followers.
100 INT. DS9 - PROMENADE
Sitting in the replimat, Evik also watches the news report.
I am deeply grateful to you all
for the confidence you showed in
me during the recent vote.
101 INT. DS9 - PROMENADE
Kira and Sisko. The screen now changes to show an image of Vedek PRALON, Solis’s friend and supporter.
And I pray that you will show
similar confidence in my deputy
and friend, Vedek Pralon Onala,
as she takes the Apex Chair in my
place. Though she follows a more
traditional path than my own, I
have faith that she will remain a
powerful advocate for diversity
and open-mindedness on Bajor.
Kira nods sadly but resignedly at this news. If Solis has to go, then Pralon is a good choice to replace him. She takes Sisko’s arm and they walk on down the Promenade, Rebecca and Raiq with them.
102 INT. DS9 - QUARK’S BAR
As Tiana continues her news report in the background, Ro turns back to Vaughn.
Damn it, that’s a shame.
Yes. He’s right, though. Mistakes
were definitely made, and someone
has to take responsibility.
Subtext established – he’s talking about himself. Ro stands, straightens herself.
Safe journey, Captain.
To us all, Commander.
Goodbyes said, he turns to leave. He catches up with Prynn at the door, and they walk off arm in arm. Ro watches them go, then turns back to Quark. She stretches across the bar towards him, leaning seductively close.
You know, Quark... Treir told me
what you said about the puppies
while I was away on the Defiant.
Calling them ‘children’ for a
change, instead of ‘those filthy
animals’. Thank you for that.
I wish you’d stop passing around
these rumours about me. I can’t
have people thinking I’m a soft
touch. Then where would I be?
I was wondering... do you think
Treir could handle the bar on her
own for a while?
He looks at her askance, and twigs what she’s getting at.
Really? Me being nice to animals
is what it takes to get you hot?
Well, that... and it’s been a
stressful few days. I must have
a lot of tension to burn off...
Treir! You’ve got the bar.
No more said – Quark throws down his towel, rounds the bar in a flash, and he and Ro are on their way out.
103 EXT. SPACE - BAJOR ORBIT
A runabout flies down towards the planet’s surface.
104 EXT. SISKO’S HOUSE – DAY
Bringing us back home to the Sisko domicile in the Kendra Valley countryside.
105 INT. SISKO’S HOUSE
Kasidy, JAKE, RENA and Jasmine Tey are all present as Sisko opens the door and enters, holding Rebecca’s hand. The girl runs to grab her mother in a fierce hug as Kasidy tries to stop herself from bursting into tears in sheer relief.
In the doorway, Kira hovers and watches, smiling to see it. Hugs are exchanged as they all express their happiness that everyone is safe and sound. Finally...
Kas, sweetheart, is it okay if I
leave Rebecca with you and Jake
and Rena for a while? I should
take Kira and Raiq back to Janir,
and I thought I’d go to Ashalla
and pay my respects to the kai.
Of course it’s alright, Ben. But
thank you for asking.
106 EXT. BAJOR ATMOSPHERE
On the runabout, as it travels through the Bajoran sky.
107 INT. RUNABOUT - COCKPIT
Sisko and Kira in the pilot’s seats, with blue sky out the windows. Raiq is presumably in the rear cabin. Sisko is silent, brooding. Kira delicately tries to get him to talk.
Benjamin...? How are you doing?
I’m fine, Nerys. Everything worked
out for the best. I’m fine.
Kira knows him too well to be fooled by that.
When Iliana and the other Iliana
and I were all in the wormhole
together a couple of years back,
we spoke to the Prophets.
I know, you told me.
They recognised that we were all
from different universes. That one
- the Intendant’s universe - they
called it the Broken Line. And I
think that was after you.
In that universe, you were dead.
The Prophets’ connection to linear
time... was broken.
What did they call this universe?
That’s how they saw me?
That’s how you were when you first
met them. And you know, I think
you’re a lot like Luka.
I do. Raiq was just like me –
angry, always fighting, but with
an enormous faith in her gods.
And Luka was just like you. Been
through a lot, lost everything,
worked hard to come back from
that, but always questioning.
Do you remember when we fought
Axno, before Vaughn came back?
I asked then... why would the
Prophets let one of these people
into the Alpha Quadrant, after
everything they’d done?
Nerys, where are you going with this?
I think this was why. You and
Kasidy are solid. And Rebecca...
it turns out she is the Avatar of
Peace after all. Just like Ohalu
predicted. All four religions -
all of Bajor - came together
around her. Because of her.
And all it took was my friend
being driven insane and killed.
And my three-year-old daughter
traumatised in ways she might
never get over.
I know. But you have to focus on
the positive, Benjamin. You have
to move forward. It’s how I’ve
always gotten through.
As the ship flies, it doesn’t look like Sisko is going to be able to do that. Off his thunderous, glowering face...
108 EXT. BAJOR ATMOSPHERE
On the runabout, as it travels on through the Bajoran sky.
109 EXT. SPACE
The USS James T Kirk zooms through open space at warp.
110 INT. KIRK – READY ROOM
Vaughn sits at his desk in his private ready room aboard the Kirk. The comm sounds...
Captain? You have a private
communiqué from Starfleet Command.
In here please, Commander.
Vaughn turns to his personal screen, taps the controls. The Federation seal appears, followed by the image of Admiral BATANIDES (last seen 10x22 “Ascension”).
Captain Vaughn. My name is Marta
Batanides. We met once before, on
Deep Space Nine.
Of course, Admiral, I remember.
What can I do for you?
I was hoping to speak with you, if
you have a moment... about the
new Federation president.
Vaughn’s face hardens. For his anti-Section 31 contact to call him directly like this... what the hell is going on?
111 EXT. BAJOR - ESTABLISHING
Back to the central monastery in Ashalla, Bajor’s capital.
112 INT. ASHALLA MONASTERY – PRAYER ROOM
The infrequently seen Prylar HAIM opens the door to the prayer room, allowing Sisko to enter.
Thank you, Prylar. I promise I
won’t be long.
The prylar bows obsequiously, and leaves the room.
Alone now, Sisko steps further into the room. An ORB BOX is in its usual place on the plinth at the head of the room. Slowly, carefully, keeping himself tight, Sisko approaches.
All of this, everything that's
happened... Nerys thinks it was
all so that the four religions
could learn to work together. And
that’s fine for her - it reaffirms
her faith, the idea that it was all
a part of your plan. She thinks
I should be grateful. But you
know what I think?
The anger boils over. Sisko picks up the heavy Orb box off its plinth, hefts it up, and HURLS it against the wall. It CRUNCHES and splinters against the stone.
Sisko advances on the damaged box, blind with fury. He KICKS at the box, KICKING and KICKING and KICKING again. JUMP CUTS as Sisko unleashes his towering rage on the box, breaking the wood and smashing the jewels.
Finally the ORB itself sits among the smashed remains of the box. Sisko GLARES down at it with a sneer of hatred. He slowly reaches down, picks up the Orb in his hands. The light THROBS as he raises the Orb over his head...
...and SMASHES the Orb into a million pieces on the ground.
Sisko stands where he was, glaring in anger at the intact Orb box, still where it belongs on its plinth.
With the hatred strong as ever, Sisko turns away to leave.
END OF SHOW
|July 4 2015, 09:32 AM||#8|
Re: DS9 11x22 - "Penitence" SEASON FINALE!
Please, guys, let me know your thoughts. I'd love to hear all your comments!
|July 5 2015, 01:17 PM||#10|
Re: DS9 11x22 - "Penitence" SEASON FINALE!
While the DS9 portion of it would be Dax's story on the Aventine plus figuring out what the DS9 crew were doing during those events, I feel like I'd have to plot out not just DS9 but TNG, VOY and TTN at the same time so that all four shows line up perfectly for the big crossover. And while I have some ideas percolating already, I really need to put them aside for now while I do this other thing.
It's been interesting to read the latest official DS9 novel, Sacraments of Fire by DRG3. I haven't quite finished it yet, but it's been a kind of AU experience, given that so many of the events are ones I wrote myself in seasons 10 and 11. Indeed the whole reason I wrote season 10 is because no-one had written that storyline in the official books. Some of what DRG3 has written is very different to my ideas, but a surprising amount is practically identical. It's been an odd experience.
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