Stand-up Comedy

[Praetor Adele]

A friend of mine and I are preparing for a stand-up bit at a Star Trek themed comedy and burlesque nerd night. Would this be a good place to possibly post our script and get some feedback? Or would anyone in particular be interested in reading it at all?

Thanks

[Angry Fanboy]

Yes by all means post it and I'll have a look.

I'm sure others will as well.

[Mark_Nguyen]

I'm a working improv comedian. Not quite the same brand of comedy, but always game to see some genre material. B-)

Mark

[Elias Vaughn]

I'd love to see a script, but honestly, I feel comedy that's meant to be spoken loses something if it's read. Maybe read the script and post a Youtube video instead, if possible?

[Angry Fanboy]

Elias Vaughn wrote:

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I'd love to see a script, but honestly, I feel comedy that's meant to be spoken loses something if it's read...

An entire industry devoted to comedy and joke books would seem to disagree.

[Elias Vaughn]

Angry Fanboy wrote:

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An entire industry devoted to comedy and joke books would seem to disagree.

Comedy books are written in a very different format than scripts that are meant to be spoken aloud in front of an audience.

[Sandoval]

Elias Vaughn wrote:

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Comedy books are written in a very different format than scripts that are meant to be spoken aloud in front of an audience.

Rubbish. Tons of comedy books are in prose form that is not intended to be spoken aloud.

You're just strainin' to do some explainin'.

[Elias Vaughn]

Sandoval wrote:

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Rubbish. Tons of comedy books are in prose form that is not intended to be spoken aloud.

You're just strainin' to do some explainin'.

...you literally just restated my actual point.

Comedy that is meant to be read is different from comedy that is meant to be heard. Reading a transcript of some George Carlin routine is not nearly as funny as watching him perform it.

[Sandoval]

Elias Vaughn wrote:

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...you literally just restated my actual point.

No.

"Literally" restating your actual point would mean a person restating your point word for word as it was written.

That is what "literally" means.

[Elias Vaughn]

Had I said restated word-for-word, you'd be right.

I did not say word-for-word. You literally restated my original point with different words, so no, I'm right again.

http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/restate?s=t

re·state [ree-steyt] Show IPA
verb (used with object), re·stat·ed, re·stat·ing.
to state again or in a new way.

http://www.thefreedictionary.com/restate

re·state (r-stt)
tr.v. re·stat·ed, re·stat·ing, re·states
To state again or in a new form.

http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/restate

Definition of RESTATE

: to state again or in another way

Emphasis all mine.

Nice try though!

[Praetor Adele]

Firstly, sorry for the delays, I often go days without logging in. Apologies.

Secondly, sorry for interrupting the discussion.

Thirdly, the working draft for tomorrow is unprintable at this point. I had no planned to go quite so dirty with our humour, but I do appreciate everyone's offers for feedback.