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Old August 10 2012, 06:47 PM   #121
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Re: Star Trek: Our Sacred Honor--A Tale Of Captain Ezri Dax

^Well, I suppose it all depends on the fate of Donatra and the Imperial Romulan State. Perhaps, in an alternate universe...

(Hey--doesn't the STO universe still have the IRS for longer than the Prime TrekLit Universe? Ah, well....)

Anyway--here's the true "deleted" scene, with Admiral Janice Rand (whom, readers of my "Rendezvous With Destiny" may recall, is thought of by Ezri as he "second mother".)

A note: Rand's backstory on Saweore was created by Vonda McIntyre for Enterprise, The First Adventure. The mission concerning Kirk is actually a novel-length story (which I titled Star Trek: Revolution) I'd written some years ago. I've never posted it, because I want to see it in print, some day. Everyone tells me I should not write a Trek novel before Pocket agrees to it, but--hope springs eternal. Also, it was in writing that novel that my skills were honed. Published or not...it was worth doing.

Anyway...



Here's why I cut the scene:



Still, looking over it, I actually like it better, now, than I did, then. I still think it'd have slowed the story down--but as a scene in itself, I actually kind of like it.
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Old August 11 2012, 10:50 PM   #122
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Re: Star Trek: Our Sacred Honor--A Tale Of Captain Ezri Dax

In the final analysis, not including this scene in the overall narrative was the right move IMO. Ezri's interactions with Rand are no different than heart-to-hearts with the President. Only when the President joins it does it really stand out. Perhaps just an additional warning about Gleer before Ezri was called to testify might have made it work. And Ezri does make some interesting suggestions that reinforce how conflicted Bacco is in putting matters of convenience over matters of conscience, all the while knowing that Bacco would not take her suggestions seriously.
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Old August 12 2012, 01:55 AM   #123
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Re: Star Trek: Our Sacred Honor--A Tale Of Captain Ezri Dax

Well, I think Bacco does take her basic points seriously, though she's aware that Ezri's being a little satirical.

Thanks for reading, mate.
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