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Old April 9 2012, 09:07 PM   #1
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April '12 Challenge Entry: "Redshirt Haiku"

A Haiku for the April 2012 Challenge, "Abandoned"



Red shirt bleeding out

Shirts of gold beaming away

Left for dead. Bastards.


-TLR
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Old April 9 2012, 09:26 PM   #2
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Re: April '12 Challenge Entry: "Redshirt Haiku"



I like it. Your avatar rounds it all off.
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Old April 9 2012, 09:36 PM   #3
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Re: April '12 Challenge Entry: "Redshirt Haiku"



This could be one of the funniest things I've read in a long time! Thanks TLR.
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Old April 9 2012, 09:48 PM   #4
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What happened to the poor security officer? And why are fellow Starfleet officers leaving one of their own in such critical condition? And how come .... oh, haiku, I get it.
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Old April 10 2012, 01:43 AM   #5
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Re: April '12 Challenge Entry: "Redshirt Haiku"

Count Zero - Thanks! I'm rather fond of the avatar.

Bry - Glad it gave you a laugh.

CeJay - I actually had planned a complete story about a hapless redshirt who was left behind during a brief but fierce planet-side skirmish with Klingons.

Then I thought, 'What the heck - just cut to the chase.'

The above haiku is dedicated to all the redshirts who assumed room temperature in the line of duty.

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Old April 10 2012, 05:03 PM   #6
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Re: April '12 Challenge Entry: "Redshirt Haiku"

Made me laugh out SO loud that my secretary came in to see if I was okay.
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Old April 10 2012, 07:23 PM   #7
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Thanks, TrekkieMonster! Glad you got a laugh out of it.
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Old April 10 2012, 10:50 PM   #8
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LOL! Excellent TLR. Excellent.
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Old April 11 2012, 02:22 AM   #9
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Thanks, Fave!
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Old April 11 2012, 04:44 AM   #10
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That was perfect!

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Old April 11 2012, 03:21 PM   #11
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Thanks, Sam - I think your picture says it all.
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