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Old September 28 2010, 04:32 PM   #91
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Re: Star Trek: Tesseract -- Part II

I have a question for you guys. Back when I very first started this story (I mean way back at part one), I just posted scenes and called them chapters. As the story grew, the chapters got bigger and included multiple scenes, but the wait between chapters got longer.

With work being what it is, I'm wondering if you guys would rather have individual scenes (i.e. incomplete chapters) posted as they're finished, or do you like the "complete" chapter thing and don't mind waiting more than a couple of weeks in between posts for the next month?

Just trying to figure out how best to keep the story going until life gets less crazy ... thanks in advance for any input.
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Old September 28 2010, 05:08 PM   #92
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Hi Kes,

I've been thinking about doing this as well for my Restoration and Glimmer of Hope stories, so I would definitely be for it. A lot of writers who publish online do it - in fact I have seen a lot of webfic where the writer puts the story up page by page.

So I would be for it, especially if it means we can get more Tesseract more often!
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Old September 28 2010, 08:08 PM   #93
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Seconded. The more often we get to read Tesseract the better. Even if its shorter pieces.
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Old October 1 2010, 03:51 AM   #94
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All right. I've got two votes for "little pieces faster" and one vote (via IM) for "wait until you're happy with it to post it." If I was voting, I'd vote with "wait until I'm happy with it," too. So if we're counting my vote, we're tied, unless someone else chimes in.

That said, I think for this chapter, if I don't have the entire thing complete by tomorrow afternoon, I will go ahead and post the first half, which IS complete. So either way, you'll get new Tesseract tomorrow.

Thanks again for your patience and for reading.

(Just a few more weeks and life will be back to normal ...)
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Old October 1 2010, 02:27 PM   #95
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I don't personally have a preference so I did not pipe up.

I'm just always happy to hear about another chapter up!
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Old October 2 2010, 01:42 AM   #96
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Well, I didn't get the entire thing done because the power was out most of the day, but it's back on now. So without further delay, here is the first section of chapter 7.

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CHAPTER SEVEN (Act I)

The problem with phasers was that pressing the trigger was far too easy. Even a type-II hand phaser was capable of producing enough energy to vaporize just about anything it touched, and that energy could be unleashed, full force, with the mere touch of a button. As the single beam shot out from the phaser’s aperture and headed for its target, everyone present seemed to draw in their breath and hold it. Standing at such close range, the resulting impact was seemingly instantaneous.

John was very actively trying not to think too much about the ultimate destructive potential of the weapon he was firing. He guided the small device with steady hands, slowly cutting through the twisted metal bulkheads currently blocking his path to the last three people T’Pring’s sensors told him were still alive and unaccounted for on the USS Sol.

It was dark, but for his teams’ headlamps, the focused light emitted by his weapon, and the hot glow of the metal as it burned away under the phaser’s beam. He’d had Par Renn cut power to this section while he cut through the mangled alloy, but with all the damaged conduits and leaking plasma running through the ship, he didn’t know for sure he wasn’t about to blow them all to hell. It was a dangerous gamble – maybe too dangerous, like T’Pring had said – but there was no way he was going to leave three people for dead if sensors said they were still alive. So he offered up a small prayer that if something was going to go right today, this would be it.

To his relief, and the relief of his team, it worked. After several minutes spent slicing through the damaged wall and door, they had a hole big enough to fit a person though – even wearing EV suits like they were … and nothing had exploded. He sighed and exchanged a satisfied glance with Osar, the Bolian medic standing nearest to him.

“We’re in,” he told T’Pring over comm.. “Where are they?”

“Just ahead of you,” came the almost icy reply from T’Pring. She wasn’t at all happy about this little stunt, but after too much time wasted debating her over it, he had finally told her in so many words to “fuck off.” He had no idea what the consequence would be for that, and he frankly didn’t care. He was the one currently responsible for those three people back there, and he would be damned if he was going to let Vulcan logic and caution force him to “play it safe” when their lives were on the line. So he had ordered Renn to cut power to this area and divert some of the Sol’s limited power to create a temporary force field between them and the rest of the ship. That way, even if he managed to get his team killed, at least everyone else would be safe.

Only he hadn’t gotten them killed. Even though he knew it came down to either luck or divine intervention, a part of him still felt a tiny bit triumphant over T’Pring and her cold, analytical logic. She was reminding him of Icheb at his very worst, and it was beginning to drive him nuts. Actually, that was unfair. Not even Icheb would have argued against this rescue effort, no matter the risk involved – of that much, John was certain.

Slowly, he and his team made their way through the hazy, empty corridor behind the damaged bulkhead they had just cut through. There was no light, very little air, and the technician who kept giving verbal updates on what he was seeing on the tricorder he was carrying said the radiation levels were extreme. So basically, it’s just like everywhere else on this godforsaken fucking ship, John thought wryly.

“Stop,” T’Pring said suddenly through the speakers in his helmet. “You’re there.” John stopped short and looked around frantically to see what she was talking about. He didn’t see or hear anything. The darkness seemed still, and their headlamps were doing a poor job of illuminating the smoke-filled space.

Then someone coughed.

Five heads turned toward the sound, and John’s stomach tightened as he saw the source of it. A human boy of no more than five or six sat slumped against the side of the corridor, barely conscious.

“Goddammit,” he breathed. “There’s a little kid in here.”

He walked up to the child and knelt down beside him, then shook him gently. “Are you okay?” he asked.

The tow-headed little boy, who looked familiar in a way John couldn’t quite place, fluttered his eyes and opened them. “Daddy?”

John’s stomach did another flip. “No, no. My name is John. I’m here to help you. What’s your name?”

“Bennett,” the little boy said, then started to cough again. John could see that there were already radiation burns forming on his pale skin. He nodded to the medic, who quickly knelt down and began scanning the boy with a medical tricorder. The grim look on the Bolian’s face told John everything he needed to know.

“Bennett, we’re going to get you out of here,” he promised. “But I need you to tell me where your family is. Who were you with? Where are they now?”

Bennett pointed at a nearby door. “In there,” he said, with some effort. “Mommy. Lucy. They’re stuck.” At this, he looked like he might start to cry, and John bit down on his tongue to suppress the impulse to swear in front of the boy. Stuck. That could mean a lot of things. None of them were good.

“Okay, Bennett,” he said. “This man’s name is Osar. He’s going to take you to the cargo bay and give you some medicine to make you feel better. And I’m going to go get your mommy and Lucy un-stuck. Okay?” The little boy looked up at him with scared but hopeful eyes, and suddenly, John was sure he knew whose child this was. He was the spitting image of Adrian Keller, the Alpha shift flight controller. He knew Adrian had a wife and two kids. Bennett, Mommy and Lucy. He had to once again resist the impulse to swear.

As the medic lifted the tiny boy and quickly carried him back toward life support and relative safety, John and the others forced the door behind him open. This time, John couldn’t stop himself from swearing aloud. Is anyone alive in here? he couldn’t help but wonder, as he surveyed the scene in front of him.

The ceiling in this chamber had mostly collapsed, filling the room with twisted debris. He didn’t see a single thing that looked human. He turned up the volume on his external suit speakers as loud as it would go. “Mrs. Keller? Lucy?”

No reply was forthcoming, so he looked to the technician with the tricorder. “Got anything, Jacobs?”

“I can’t get a clear reading on anything,” the crewman muttered, fussing with the display in frustration. “Too much goddamn radiation in here.”

“T’Pring,” John said, “Can you get us any closer?”

“Negative,” she replied over the comm.. “On our sensors you appear to be right on top of them. There may be interference. Continue your search.”

“Acknowledged,” John replied. “Mrs. Keller?!” he shouted, and as he did, his pitch rose slightly, gaining a slightly desperate quality that made him wince when he heard it coming back in through the speakers in his helmet. He took a deep breath. Hold it together, Quigley, he told himself. You fall apart now, it’s over.

After a moment, he heard a small sound, something between a moan and a whimper, coming from under the debris. He turned to illuminate the space. “Mrs. Keller? Lucy?”

“Here,” came the hoarsely whispered reply. “We’re here. Please help my daughter.”
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Old October 2 2010, 01:27 PM   #97
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I can see what you did there with the opening ... very clever and subtle misdirection.

Yes, pressing that trigger is way too easy. There is another officer on another ship who better learn this lesson quickly.

John continues on his crucible and continues to distinguish himself, including disregarding the possibly more experienced and more senior T'Pring to account for every last person missing in action. That's a bold move.

But this is clearly a bold guy, even if he doesn't realize it yet. Somebody better give this dude some sort of medal when all this is over.
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Old October 2 2010, 02:57 PM   #98
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KK a ragbag of a response here; I'm between countries and down to minimum internet for about another week.

First off a comeback to your comeback to my comeback to the previous chapter of Tesseract

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As for the poker game ... feel free to compare and contrast Maren and Adele, but that's not what I intended when writing this chapter. The two of them do have some interesting almost-parallels, though.
Yeah! Right at that point their situations, seemed to be running on pretty much parallel tracks; which is what struck me

Next . . . The Literature Corner
Have you come across a Teen Fiction Fan Fave Series called Skulduggery Pleasant XXX ? The latest book out has a major new behemoth of a character in it called . . . Tesseract

Now then > chapters or crumbs ???

Chapters every time I'd much rather wait and get a decent, coherent chunk rather than small snippets. That fragmentary style actually puts me off net fic. You'd probably find me staying away for months / years in the hopes of coming back to a chapter-in-installments.

Doesn't look like I'l get to read & review the next chapter today - my alllotted hour is nearly run but hopefully soon.
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Old October 2 2010, 09:25 PM   #99
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Dear Kes:
Greetings. I know I haven't been around for a long while. Sorry for that. Rrecently, I once again found Tesseract, and am very happy for it. Part II is AWESOME, Kes. Thank you!

But what I'm thinking of right now isn't merely your linguistic skill, all that narrative niftiness. What I'm thinking and feeling right now is profound and acute gratitude. I was so pissed this morning--at a great many people and things. Ever more, I find that I am a misanthropic-humanist.

So, there I was, pissed and sad. Then I indulged my whim (hope!) that you'd have posted a new chapter, especially since I'm bereft of fresh Trek for at least another month until Zero Sum Game hits the stores. Calloo calay! You did not disappoint.

The first few lines of this chapter had me thinking and fearing the prospect that this was to be about Icheb and Maren. I strove mightily to NOT skip ahead several sentences. Then when the phaser fired, I literally gasped! NO!, I thought, she would not have Maren shoot Icheb in the head. Obviously, you didn't. Which made John's finding Adrian Keller's kids and wife all the more thrilling. Not only had the love of Icheb's life not shot his brains and cortical array out of his skull, but John Quigley seems to be saving the day--heretofore bad judgement, catastrophe, and Vulcan logic notwithstanding.

At the end of the chapter when Mrs. Keller called out for help, I felt a rush that was, for me, ALL about Trek--the triumph of hope. I really needed that this morning. Thank you Kes.

With great regard,
'Los

PS: Got my fingers crossed that the Kellers make it. Not only great for Adrian, but, honestly (to be a bit crass), this will so endear John to Lt. Cmdr Keller and the senior staff in general, and to the Kellers's dinner guest, The Captain, particularly. John can use a commendation right about now.... I just hope Ryzal's family is okay too.
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Old October 3 2010, 11:28 AM   #100
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John gets another dose of command reality as he struggles valiantly to save more lives, only to discover those trapped in the radiation are the most vulnerable of his charges… civilians.

Unfortunately, I have the sinking feeling that he may soon discover that you can’t save everyone all the time.

Gritty stuff here, kes7, and brilliantly executed.
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Old October 4 2010, 05:31 AM   #101
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I'm really glad I posted this bit. I'm not going to make a habit of posting fragments like this, but this section is so separate, story-wise, from the second half of the chapter that it could have been its own chapter if not for the shorter length ... and it had been a while. I hate keeping people waiting. Anyway, I'm glad I posted because your feedback, as always, gets my brain working again. Thanks so much!

CeJay - I'm glad you liked the opening. I agree with your assessment of the situation on the other ship. I also love how you're so in JQ's corner. A lot of people would take issue with his telling T'Pring off and refusing to go along with her wishes, but you're all for it. Bold. We'll see if it works out for him. Thanks for reading and commenting!

tau136 -- No, I've never heard of that series, but I looked it up on Wikipedia and saw the character listed. Seems like a weird name for him. But the series has a weird name, really! As for the posting snippets thing, here's the deal -- to the extent that I do it, it will only be through this month, and then only CLEARLY separate bits that can stand on their own as scenes. Actually, I'm hoping not to have to resort to this again at all. I much prefer posting complete, coherent chapters. But I felt like it was better to give you this scene than to make you wait until I complete another scene that isn't at all related to this one. I hope that makes sense. Anyway, it's a very temporary thing if it happens again at all. I'll be back to normal posting speed in early November. I hope you'll stick with it!

Diogenes - YAY, YOU'RE BACK! You have no idea how huge my smile was upon seeing your name! I'd honestly been worried about you! That was quite some commentary, and I am so grateful for it. Thank you. If I lifted your mood at all, and made you think of hope, well, I think that's much, much more than any writer can reasonably ask for and I'm really, really happy about that. Did you get to read all of part one when you came back? It ended up being like 52 chapters, yikes. Anyway, welcome back and I'm so glad you're enjoying part two. Thanks so much for the wonderful review.

Gibraltar -- Thank you for the very kind comments. Gritty? Who knew? Last year's soap opera is this year's CSI? Kidding. Just not used to hearing my stuff referenced that way. I really appreciate the compliment, and yeah ... John is learning some serious lessons here, with more to come. Thanks again.
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Old October 5 2010, 02:00 PM   #102
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I'm really glad I posted this bit. I'm not going to make a habit of posting fragments like this, but this section is so separate, story-wise, from the second half of the chapter that it could have been its own chapter if not for the shorter length ... and it had been a while. I hate keeping people waiting.

tau136 -- No, I've never heard of that series, but I looked it up on Wikipedia and saw the character listed. Seems like a weird name for him. But the series has a weird name.

I hope you'll stick with it!
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Most the names in the books are odd - that's one of the leitmotifs.

Waiting ... Waitnig ... Waiting - oh that's fine cos whenever the story arrives it is well worth a wait; doesn't bother me.

Going into the Great Quigley Rescue Expedition! Yes; he is doing well and against the advice of his staid counterpart. His logistic skills are coming to the fore again; making best use of all the limited resources. However, he hasn't changed as much as he might. Despite holding up under stress and taking sure command he is still running with his emotions in making everyone his personal responsibility and using that to underpin his decisions. This time he has lucked out; in that none of his choices have come back to hit him in the face and he'll very likely be pulling a commendation, if the tide keeps flowing with him. it is only luck though. If his earlier rescue faux pas on Tesseract had worked out he'd have come out of that shining too. it didn't and he didn't. This time the tumblers are falling into line but is that any reliable way to operate as a senior officer.
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Old October 5 2010, 04:03 PM   #103
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Glad to see I haven't scared you off.

All of your points regarding John are spot on. He's handling himself all right and has a good mind for tactics and logistics, but things have largely gone his way this time around. And even though he's getting emotionally involved, there's no one here he's especially close to. I'm thinking if it had been ... oh, say Maren O'Connor dying back in engineering, we'd be seeing a very different JQ. As it is, he's barely hanging on to his objectivity. (Actually, it's possible he lost his objectivity the moment he told T'Pring to get bent.) He's definitely taken ownership of responsibility for the lives of the people on that ship in a very personal way. We'll see how it pans out ...
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Old October 6 2010, 09:42 AM   #104
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Hi Kes!

Great little scene here and I definitely see what you mean about it standing on its own. This could most certainly have been a chapter in and of itself.

I like JQ, he is unlike most Starfleet officers we are used to and it is nice to see someone who cares so much. Although that may play foul with his objectivity, it also makes him very likeable. So far he seems to be doing pretty well, but as you said in your response to tau, we still have no idea how this is going to pan out in the end.

Well worth the wait and can't wait for the rest of the chapter!!!

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Yay JQ! He is again pulling off risky moves and taking decisions that could back fire. For which, you gotta admire his ... ahem ... but seriously, he is a clever guy trying to be very practical and calm in a bad situation. Part of that, is telling a certain Vulcan to go to hell - which let's remember Kirk use t do all the time - so it must be a plus in his favour! LOL! But as pointed out, his decisions may yet backfire, not everyone is out of this alive yet, there's so much potential for this to go wrong, and the Sol is still very heavily damaged - who knows if it can hold up long enough for John to effect a rescue. Damn. It hits home when kids are involved. Now it is going to be really difficult for John. Great stuff again kes!
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