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Old November 22 2009, 07:41 PM   #31
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Re: Trek Haiku, Could you write poetry about star trek, I had to.

Time and space ---
undiscovered countries;
final frontiers.
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Old November 22 2009, 10:31 PM   #32
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Time and space ---
undiscovered countries;
final frontiers.
5-7-5, not 3-6-4. Nice sentiment, but not haiku.
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Old November 22 2009, 11:16 PM   #33
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Time and space ---
undiscovered countries;
final frontiers.
5-7-5, not 3-6-4. Nice sentiment, but not haiku.
It is, actually. Traditionally, haiku counts sound units - moras - rather than syllables. A mora, so far as haiku is concerned, is counted for each syllable nucleus (generally the vowel sound), and for each syllable coda (other elements after the nucleus) in a stressed syllable (e.g., Nippon, the Japanese name for Japan, has four mora: ni-p-po-n).
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Old November 23 2009, 03:55 AM   #34
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Time and space ---
undiscovered countries;
final frontiers.
5-7-5, not 3-6-4. Nice sentiment, but not haiku.
It is, actually. Traditionally, haiku counts sound units - moras - rather than syllables. A mora, so far as haiku is concerned, is counted for each syllable nucleus (generally the vowel sound), and for each syllable coda (other elements after the nucleus) in a stressed syllable (e.g., Nippon, the Japanese name for Japan, has four mora: ni-p-po-n).
As I have no experience with Japanese language or poetry beyond what I learned in English class, I will defer to your apparently superior expertise. I stand corrected, and your poem was very nice, indeed.
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Old November 23 2009, 07:49 AM   #35
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Thank you.

I was surprised to learn about the mora format, actually. I looked up the traditions of haiku before writing, since I hadn't written one in years - apparently, a mistranslation (the Japanese on - which means "mora" - to "syllable") has led to our including extra moras that we shouldn't.
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Old November 23 2009, 07:56 AM   #36
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Kathryn your bunnage
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You've let yourself go!
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Old November 23 2009, 04:39 PM   #37
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Oh where oh where has
Your little beard gone, oh where
Oh where could it be?
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Old November 23 2009, 05:16 PM   #38
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Neelix your nostril
hairs excite my secret bits
Pluck them! Pluck them now!


Hilarious and gross!




Brit - thank you for the link to Dakota's work. Really very lovely. A real tragedy for more than just the loss of her wit.
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Old November 23 2009, 09:11 PM   #39
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Sleek curves and ample
Nacelles, Warmth in cold Space;
Home away from home.

Trek limericks are fun too but this is a form that deserves a real go!
Love it!

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Old November 24 2009, 01:04 AM   #40
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Vorik has Pon Farr,
but do not fear, Be'lanna,
here comes Tom Paris! <--- My favorite so far!

My english teacher didnt understand and i had to write another one that was more related to nature..

atmosphrere is cold
the sky is blackened and dark
this space - null and void
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Old November 24 2009, 11:32 AM   #41
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(I am rather fond of this one..)

Regeneration
In Unimatrix Zero
Annika awakes
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Old November 24 2009, 11:51 AM   #42
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The Kazon are not
Remarkable. They are not
Assimilated.
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Old November 30 2009, 04:58 AM   #43
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Blandest writing, no
Character development.
Deep Space Nine kicks ass.



Sorry I'll go back to my usual board...
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Old November 30 2009, 07:12 PM   #44
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Leola root stew
scourge of any sane man
Toss out the airlock!
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Old November 30 2009, 07:20 PM   #45
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Klingon Blood wine
Raktajino on the rocks
Jamja sticks forever.
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