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Old October 16 2009, 06:57 PM   #46
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USS ANGEL – BRIDGE
ZETHANDER
UFP SPACE
September 12th 2371 – 1300 FST


“Flight deck reports both Valkyries recovered Sir. Ensign Dixon may have fractured ribs but otherwise no other injuries.”

Dan sighed as he stood from the centre seat. “Thank you Commander, you have the bridge. I’ll need to contact Starfleet.” Kat nodded as he headed towards the ready room. “Lay in a course back to Zethander and arrange an encrypted channel to Command please.”

As Dan entered his ready room, he sat in the chair with a great weight settling on his shoulders. Locking the door, he tried to spot the flaw in his orders that could have prevented any of this, but found nothing. His introspection was cut short as the desk monitor lit up with the encrypted logo which quickly switched to the face of Admiral Bryan.

Dan quickly and succinctly updated the Admiral on the closing events in the Zethander mission and waited for a response. It wasn’t what he’d expected.

“Captain.” Bryan’s face was sombre as he spoke. “We have a great deal to discuss and I’m afraid none of it is good.”


USS ANGEL – BRIDGE
ZETHANDER
UFP SPACE
September 12th 2371 – 1317 FST


By the time Dan returned to the bridge, Angel was back in orbit over Zethander. His expression was distant and drawn and he didn’t even look at Kat as he took his place in the centre seat.

For a moment he did nothing except take a deep breath.
Finally exhaling, he opened an intraship channel on the arm console and spoke in a monotone that Kat had never heard from him in all their years of service.

“All hands, this is the Captain.” He paused, then shaking his head almost imperceptibly, continued. “By order of Starfleet Command as of this stardate, command of the USS Angel is temporarily transferred to Commander Katerina Gray. I expect her to be accorded the respect and trust that you have shown me during our recent mission. That is all.”

Standing once more he turned to face Kat. “Commander, if you would join me in the ready room with Commander DeSalle?”

Without waiting for a response, he strode from the bridge.

The shocked silence seemed to stretch for an eternity before Kat looked over to DeSalle whose shrug spoke volumes.


USS ANGEL – CAPTAIN’S READY ROOM
ZETHANDER
UFP SPACE
September 12th 2371 – 1320 FST


When the door closed behind Kat she looked at Dan with disbelief.

“What the hell is...” Dan held up his hand to silence her. He turned first to DeSalle.

“Commander you have orders to place me under close arrest at this time. I will be restricted to my quarters until such time as transportation becomes available to deliver me under escort to Deep Space 9. At no time will I be allowed contact, either in person or via electronic means, with any other person. Is that understood?”

Clearly DeSalle didn’t understand. “Sir? Are my orders in writing?”

“They will be when you return to security. Is this a problem?”

DeSalle, a quiet spoken and intense man at the best of times, lowered his voice even more. “To be honest Sir, yes.”

Fishlock pinned him with that look.

"I'll pretend I didn't hear that son." When he pointed his fingers, it might as well have been a fully charged phaser. "Make sure I don't have to pretend again."

DeSalle reluctantly drew himself up. “Yes Sir.”

Turning to Kat, his expression was unreadable. “Commander Gray, you are hereby authorised under Starfleet Order 113, Change of Captaincy, to access files pertaining to field promotion and command change of a Starfleet vessel. These files will be available to you immediately.”

For a moment, his impenetrable expression almost cracked, but with an effort he reined it in. Removing his commbadge he placed it carefully on the desk.

“The command of the USS Angel is yours Captain. Further orders will arrive from Starfleet shortly, but for the time being you are to continue with the humanitarian mission on Zethander. Do you have any questions?”

Kat wanted to say “thousands” but instead shook her head. “No Sir, not at this time.”

“Commander DeSalle?” Dan headed for the door and stopped briefly next to Kat. She was sure there were tears in his eyes as he squeezed her arm. As he left, she was certain there were tears in her own.


EPILOGUE

USS ANGEL – PHOENIX LOUNGE
ZETHANDER – GEOSTATIONARY ORBIT
UFP SPACE
September 12th 2371 – 1930 FST


Kat looked around the totally revamped crew lounge. Under any other circumstances, it would have been a cause for celebration and a grand opening but with the shocking events of Dan’s departure Kat had decided that should be postponed. Both Guinan and Melista had agreed.

“It’s unbelievable what you’ve done with the place ladies. Thank you.”

Guinan smiled. “Well with the place shaking around so much in the past 24 hours, we were lucky it was just a few glasses that got broken.”

The crew lounge had been transformed from its dull and drab previous incarnation into something else again. Rechristened the Phoenix Lounge, its centre piece was a large model of Zefram Cochrane’s Phoenix spaceship suspended from the ceiling. Around the walls were prints of the historic man and his flight as well as mementoes such as framed letters, a small scale replica of the famous Zefram Cochrane statue and a remarkably realistic reproduction of the Phoenix control column.

Across the open space of the dance floor Kat saw a brightly coloured box standing close to the small circular stage. Intrigued, she strolled over followed by the mother and daughter team.

“It’s as close a reproduction of old Zef’s juke box as we could find,” grinned Melista. “Give it a try.” She pointed at the plastic manual buttons at the top of the brightly coloured panel.

Tentatively, Kat pressed three random buttons. Deep within the juke box, something whirred, there was a slight hiss from the speakers and then with a sound like Armageddon a blast of rock and roll filled the lounge.

Guinan winced and leaned around behind to turn down the volume allowing Kat to uncover her ears. “Don’t worry; we’ll be fitting it with a full library of music. That just happens to be the only track on there at the moment.”

“Apparently one of Zefram Cochrane’s favourites according to a close source,” Melista grinned.

Kat faced Guinan and Melista. “Seriously you guys have worked wonders. Dan would be so pleased.”

“Will be pleased,” corrected Guinan. “If there’s one thing I’ve learned in life Kat, never take anything at face value. Things aren’t always necessarily what they seem.” She smiled as she hugged Kat and whispered, “He’ll be back.”


USS ANGEL – FLIGHT DECK BAY ONE
ZETHANDER – GEOSTATIONARY ORBIT
UFP SPACE
September 12th 2371 – 2135 FST


MCPO Spider Tarrant shook his head in disgust. In the darkened environment of Bay One, he’d been working tirelessly on the USS Hildr in an attempt to unlock the computer system but to no avail.

He’d restored mainline power to the fighter and in all other respects the ship was operational but the computer simply wouldn’t reset. He’d tried an onboard reboot which had failed to initialise. He’d tried it again from Angel’s mainframe and the result was the same.

If that wasn’t bad enough, strange things were happening in the cockpit. The most recent had been an almost musical repetition of beeps.

Ok this is getting spooky now he thought, then slowly began to smile.

“Oh Dingbat, you pesky little devil.” He cast his mind back several years to there last meeting with Ganyol and remembered how he’d set Dingbat up to believe a particular yacht was haunted. It seemed Dingbat hadn’t forgotten and their recent meeting with Ganyol seemed the perfect excuse to repay the prank.

“Alright my haunted little Hildr, we’ll call it quits for tonight while I search out my erstwhile partner.”

Shaking his head, he slipped from the cockpit and shut the overhead hatch. Wiping a small smear of lubricant from the fuselage he grinned. “Don’t worry girl, we’ll get the exorcist in first thing tomorrow.”

As the bay door slid shut behind him for the night, four small blue lights flashed in rapid sequence in the cockpit before they too finally dimmed into darkness.
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Old October 16 2009, 07:06 PM   #47
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And so concludes STAR TREK : ANGEL - THAT OTHERS MAY LIVE, but the story continues in BROKEN SWORD, currently in production! (First chapters here shortly if people want them?)

I realise my writing needs to be worked on but I thank everybody who has taken the time to contact me with their kind (and shockingly unanimous) praise and comments. It makes the writing process SO worthwhile when people enjoy it!

As far as canon is concerned I have tried hard to keep events both true to canon technical and timeline through research at MEMORY ALPHA and BETA, so a big thanks to the guys there!

One HUGE thanks I really need to give is to a guy from the SCIFI MESHES board by the name of William Johnson. He kindly allowed me use of a ship he'd created, the USS Mainstay, to refit into the USS Angel. There are renders on my website which are just fantastic as it was the perfect vessel for my needs so his kindness was instrumental in giving my crew a place to work, party and suffer.

Thanks Bill!


USS ANGEL/DOCK - MODEL AND RENDER BY WILLIAM JOHNSON ~ COMPOSITE BY NIGEL KERR


In the meantime, if you want more it will be my pleasure!

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Old October 17 2009, 02:12 AM   #48
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Good on Petrov! I was glad to see her overcoming her panic (and probably more than a bit of claustrophobia) to make it back to the surface. Stealing the Rhino was a stroke of genius. I hope she survives long enough to inform Militia Command of what’s happening with the Borg.

Misaki’s reactions to the ongoing crisis and the deaths of her comrades are well drawn. Fortunately she realizes that she can mourn later and that now’s the time for action.
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Old October 17 2009, 07:20 AM   #49
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Mere words seem insufficient to express how terribly, terribly wrong the situation has suddenly turned. I had mistakenly thought things were as bad as they were going to get. I was wrong. The introduction of the Omega molecule now threatens not only the continued existence of Chariscarpia’s magnificent vessel, but the looming specter of the Borg now casts a shadow over both her ship as well as the Angel.

Question: Per SFC’s instructions regarding Chariscarpia’s ship… wouldn’t destroying her vessel cause the molecule to be released from whatever controlled containment system it was in? Wouldn’t that prove more dangerous than merely letting the ship leave with instructions to stay away from Federation space?
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Old October 17 2009, 09:42 AM   #50
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I'll be honest, that thought had crossed my mind too Gibraltar!

However, the only OMEGA incident that canon offers us is on VOYAGER in the Delta Quadrant where the Omega Directive is initiated. (Voy : OMEGA DIRECTIVE)

According to MEMORY ALPHA (which references that episode):

The captain, absolutely forbidden from discussing anything about what was happening with any member of his/her crew, would contact Starfleet Command and inform them of the situation. Starfleet Command would then dispatch in a specialized team authorized to use whatever means necessary to destroy the molecules.

My interpretation was that the team would arrive and, discovering that the particle was not naturally occurring, reassess the situation to take into account Chariscarpia's unique situation.

Obviously events overrode that option, but I agree that destroying a controlled molecule doesn't make sense for two reasons.

1. This is a first contact with an advanced civilization that has obviously controlled the molecule, indicating to me at least that discussion is more important than action.

2. With the chance of exchanging information with Chariscarpia, the Federation would benefit greatly from obtaining that technology.

I suspect that Starfleet needs to inspect its modus operandi!
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Old October 17 2009, 04:03 PM   #51
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That… was a nail biter.

The crew of the Angel once again races to save the day against the nearly overwhelming odds of an insidious Borg plan already well underway.

Chariscarpia’s ultimate sacrifice in the final seconds is a tragedy, not only in the loss of her ship and her person, but all she could have taught the Federation about the vast and as yet unexplored (by Starfleet, anyway) reaches of the galaxy.

If this is a victory, it tastes of ashes.
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Old October 17 2009, 04:09 PM   #52
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I have to admit that I rather expected Admiral Bryan to rub his hands together and congratulate Fishlock on a mission that, if nothing else, resulted in a resolution of both the Borg and Omega Molecule threats.

No. Such. Luck.

As if this crew hasn’t been through enough as is, now they have to stomach the removal of the captain that led them through their first trial by fire? And what of Kat, now holding the reigns, duty-bound to fill Dan’s boots come what may?

And the unexplained quirks in the Valkyrie’s computers… there’s a lot of dangling threads here. Fortunately, that sounds like a great place to pick up the story.

This was a really fabulous tale, though for a while there I hadn’t a clue how you would manage to tie up so many concurrent plot arcs. Way to come onto the fanfic board with a roar.

You can count me along for the ride, wherever Angel takes us.
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Old October 17 2009, 04:43 PM   #53
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I'll just say 'heed the words of the El-Aurian'!

Book Two coming shortly!
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Old October 18 2009, 09:21 PM   #54
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I finally found the time to read this in it's entirety. I'm very impressed mate! WHY IS THIS NOT IN PRINT?
On a side note. How did you know I'm known for my BBQ?
Keep up the great work.
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Old October 19 2009, 01:36 AM   #55
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I finally found the time to read this in it's entirety. I'm very impressed mate! WHY IS THIS NOT IN PRINT?
On a side note. How did you know I'm known for my BBQ?
Keep up the great work.
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[bandwagon]I've been saying for sometime now that several of our TBBS FanFic writers are easily as good as, if not better than, some of the Trek Fic authors who are published. That is not to diminish the published Trek Fic writers. But, there are many writers on this Board who really deserve to see print.[/bandwagon]

And I agree, I'm really enjoying this so far (though I'm not quite caught up just yet.
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Old October 19 2009, 07:16 AM   #56
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Oh, you guys....

Sadly Pocket Books/Simon & Schuster/the Gods that be won't accept submissions on new crews.

To be honest, I've scanned the fan-fiction here and am blown away by much of it, seriously.

So ta very kindly for the kudos chaps and chappesses, but I suspect that print is a long way off for me!

OH, PS A CERTAIN CONTRIBUTOR TO THIS THREAD IS ALSO THE MAIN DRIVING FORCR IN KEEPING IT GOING!

I PRESENT THE MAN WHO MADE ANGEL FLY....

No, it's a secret for now unless he doesn't mind me telling!
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Old October 19 2009, 03:43 PM   #57
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I've just finished reading this, after seeing the Trek Art thread for your crew. I'm very impressed, great read
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Old October 19 2009, 07:48 PM   #58
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I say... Give up the other guys ident!
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Ladies, gentlemen, tribbles!

I give you the one and only Bill Johnson (aka Ducautt) who not only created the USS Mainstay (the vessel that became the USS Angel) but also took a starring role as the captain of said vessel!

Many many thanks are due to Bill for letting me play in his creation!

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Any chance of providing a link to pics of the ship? I'd love to take a gander.
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