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Old March 17 2013, 12:39 AM   #46
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I'm really enjoying this so far, I've always wanted to read something about the fall of the federation, and I really enjoy how your nailing the characters, It's fun to see the bad-guys win from time to time. And reading the parts with Dukat as "lord of the earth" are the reasons why. The guy clearly has long term goals, which don't involve the Dominion I think. This is one of those Fanfics that surpasses alot of whats been published...I see a good future ahead of you as a writer
Wow, that's really amazing praise! I'm really glad you think I'm nailing the characters; that's something I try hard to do.
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Old March 17 2013, 12:40 AM   #47
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Really enjoyed this latest installment...I felt like I could relate in a way, I had been holding onto something from my past that I needed to let go, and it was hard to finally make that choice, but it had to be done for the sake of the future. One very small..teeny weeny nit-pick, you state that the Enterprises sensors couldn't detect a field mouse inside the ship because they were "focused on bigger and more important things". This doesn't seem to make sense, I would suggest the sensor's are off line because parts had been cannibalised for more critical needs. this is a flotilla of ships without a proper industrial base after all...again, a minor thing...I'm loving this story..
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Old March 17 2013, 12:40 AM   #48
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All of this has been wonderfully well thought-out so far, and as mentioned previously every character feels exactly like how we'd expect them to be. No-one is out of character, and I think we all agree we can easily visualise the actors speaking their respective lines. There are people elsewhere who can't even keep their own character creations consistent (you hear me, former Voyager writers?!) but this has all been solid stuff so far.

To echo Tribble Puncher, IMO you have a great future both as a contributor to the forum and as a writer.

Now, MOAR!
Thanks, that's incredibly nice to hear (but probably undeserved). I really do try to visualize the character saying the lines I write, which does help a lot.
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Old March 17 2013, 12:45 AM   #49
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Really enjoyed this latest installment...I felt like I could relate in a way, I had been holding onto something from my past that I needed to let go, and it was hard to finally make that choice, but it had to be done for the sake of the future. One very small..teeny weeny nit-pick, you state that the Enterprises sensors couldn't detect a field mouse inside the ship because they were "focused on bigger and more important things". This doesn't seem to make sense, I would suggest the sensor's are off line because parts had been cannibalised for more critical needs. this is a flotilla of ships without a proper industrial base after all...again, a minor thing...I'm loving this story..
So noted (and changed). I think I had a point as to why the sensors wouldn't pick up a mouse, but on second thought it's not really valid no matter what I used as an excuse. The internal sensors were officially damaged during the battle. That's my new line on that one...thanks for the help!
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Old March 17 2013, 07:11 AM   #50
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Oh, boy...that Bajoran artifact Picard found...after what happened (so far) after Picard fired on it, I'm getting a very bad feeling as to what it might be. That said, I could also be wrong, considering what happened in "Emissary" to Sisko, and the tone his visions took.

As for that mouse...I have a theory on that, too, though it could be either a huge boon, or a terrible disaster...

And more on the dynamics of the ruling junta! Your portrayal of Dukat victorious is fascinating, and I can't wait to see how his excursion goes.

Keep it coming!
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Old March 19 2013, 06:04 AM   #51
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Erehwon—Chapter Six
U.S.S. Voyager
In Orbit of Planet Erehwon

Delta Quadrant
Stardate 57505.83 (February 18, 2381)



“Captain.”

Kathryn Janeway broke free from her reverie and cleared her throat. “Tuvok. Yes. Come in, please.”

Her Vulcan first officer entered the ready room. “Captain. It is 0900 hours. The crew is assembled in the Recreation Deck, as per your orders.”

Janeway nodded slowly. “Right.” She got up and stretched, taking a moment to look out at the bright blue planet below. Wispy clouds floated across a large stretch of ocean.

“I haven’t been looking forward to this moment, Tuvok.”

Tuvok straightened, hands clasped behind his back. “It would be illogical for you to positively anticipate such an event, Captain. “

Janeway smiled. “That’s true.” She turned to face the Vulcan, a decade’s worth of worry and concern bearing down on her soul. “But this is the speech I’ve always dreaded having to make, Tuvok. To tell this crew, this family, that their journey must end here…it breaks my heart.”

“Considering the changes that have occurred in the Alpha Quadrant during our absence, your decision is in fact most rational, Captain.”

Janeway placed her hand on the window, gazing out at the planet below. “I never had any doubt that this ship would make it home. No matter what the universe dished out at us, we survived…and kept going. The Kazon, the Borg, Species 8472, the Korroalis...” Janeway trailed off.

Tuvok keenly felt the emotional loss that the Dominion victory over the Federation represented for both his people and the crew of the Voyager as a whole. He had read the Vulcan Instrument of Surrender to the Dominion, and it was only logical to assume that his family had either been killed or sent to a labor camp. Tuvok deeply felt their loss. He could feel the ancient Vulcan rage burning within him, suppressed only through the strong discipline of logic. Outwardly, of course, he exhibited none of this. Of course.

“Nevertheless, Captain,” said Tuvok, “the crew of this vessel have always trusted your judgment. Despite what has happened in the Alpha Quadrant, that one simple fact has not changed.”

Janeway closed her eyes and allowed her mind to drift homewards, if only for a second. “And you sincerely believe I am not betraying that trust?”

Tuvok raised an eyebrow. “My feelings are irrelevant, Captain. Based upon all available evidence, to believe such a thing would be quite illogical.”

Janeway smiled in spite of herself. No matter what happened, she knew she could always rely on Tuvok. He was her rock, her calm in the midst of this terrible storm…a storm that showed no sign of abating.

“Come on, old friend,” Janeway said quietly, approaching the waiting Vulcan. “Let’s go talk to them.”




On Voyager’s recreation deck, all of the ship’s personnel milled around in small groups. Some nervously made small talk while awaiting Janeway’s arrival; others simply waited quietly, waiting for confirmation of the inevitable. Finally, at 09:15 hours, the bosuns whistle sounded and the crew’s attention turned to the dais that had been set up on the deck.

Behind the dais, a turbolift door opened and Janeway and Tuvok appeared. The two mounted the dais and Commander Tuvok stepped to the podium, ahead of the captain.

“Captain on deck,” he called out sternly.

The crew—Starfleet and civilian alike—snapped to attention.

Tuvok briskly walked down the steps and joined the crew at attention.

Janeway gripped the sides of the podium.

“At ease,” she said.

All eyes were on Janeway as she contemplated saying the words that would most certainly change all of their lives forever. This was the moment.

“Good morning.” Janeway made eye contact with Tuvok, who nodded almost imperceptibly. She continued:

“On Stardate 57385, Voyager unexpectedly made contact with the U.S.S. Defiant while en route to the Alpha Quadrant. While it was a great relief to finally get back in touch with Starfleet, the circumstances that made our meeting possible were not the happy ones we had all dreamed about since our arrival in the Delta Quadrant.”

Janeway loosened her grip on the podium. “Two years after we were flung across the galaxy by the Caretaker Array, the Dominion invaded the Federation and our allies in the Klingon Empire. Aided by an alliance of Alpha Quadrant powers hostile to the Federation, the Dominion successfully prosecuted their war of aggression. Within five short years, the Klingon Empire had been all but annihilated… and the Federation had been dissolved.”

“Tragically,” Janeway continued, “the destination this ship and this crew have been striving towards for the last ten years is now an occupied world. Earth is in enemy hands. Our friends…our families…they are all now under the yoke of the Dominion.”

The assemblage stood in silent agony. Janeway took a deep breath and continued.

“If it had not been for our fortuitous encounter with the Defiant, this ship and crew would have continued on to Earth…only to wind up in the hands of a brutal and ruthless enemy…or worse.”

"Together, this crew has spent ten years trying to escape the Delta Quadrant. Now, as fate would have it, we find our exiled compatriots seeking refuge here. They have welcomed us with open arms. And much like us, they were forced to undertake a voyage to the unknown against their will. Is it simply coincidence that here, deep in unexplored space, we have come together?”

Janeway shook her head. “I refuse to believe it is. Ladies and gentlemen, I have always feared there would come a day when I would have to give the order to abandon our course for home. Nothing is or has ever been more important to me than making sure each and every one of you once again see the skies of your home world.”

Janeway confidently faced her crew. “But if Erehwon is to be where the place where we make a stand against tyranny, then we belong here. For now, this is our home. We know this quadrant. We have made many friends, and many enemies here. I firmly believe that the men, women, and children on this vessel can contribute to the war effort. We must help the fleet here at Erehwon recover its strength and grow. We must forge alliances. We must rebuild so that one day, we can take back what’s ours.”

The crowd was beginning to shake off the despair. People were roused. “I want you all to remember one very important thing. Voyager’s mission to return to the Alpha Quadrant is far from over.” Janeway smiled confidently. “Someday, this ship will return to Earth. That, my friends, is my solemn promise to you.”

The crowd erupted in cheers. Janeway smiled, and honestly could not tell if the lump in her throat was pride in her crew or a deep, abiding sadness.




Admiral William Ross, in his office planetside, watched on his viewer as the Voyager crew applauded their captain. Turning the display off, he turned to the man sitting across from him in Ross’s private quarters.

“What do you think, Sloan?”

The human male shrugged noncommittally. “We knew this day was coming, Admiral. As expected, Janeway is doing exactly what we need her to do.”

Ross frowned. The admiral was slightly anxious with how fast things were moving along. “You’re sure we’re ready for this?”

Sloan smiled, but as always the gesture seemed somewhat insincere. “Admiral Ross,” the man replied, “I have never been so sure of anything in my life.”
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Old March 19 2013, 06:05 AM   #52
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And more on the dynamics of the ruling junta! Your portrayal of Dukat victorious is fascinating, and I can't wait to see how his excursion goes.

Keep it coming!
Me either, actually.

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Old March 19 2013, 11:02 AM   #53
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I just read through the entire story you've posted so far and I must say that I'm really impressed with how you've taken this particular 'what if' situation! Though, I must say that you've left me with a lot of questions that I'm eager to see the answers to in future posts of this story.

Please keep writing!

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Will there ever be another addition?
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Old May 5 2013, 08:03 PM   #55
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I have thoroughly enjoyed reading this story, doublegoodprole. I hope that you will continue it so we all can see what fates befall our exiled heroes and scheming villains.
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Old August 24 2013, 10:30 AM   #56
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Wow, I'm sorry to see that DGP seems to have stopped writing this. I came upon it, and even though I'm not usually a fan of dystopic worlds, I was really into it. I really do like the idea of fanfic that takes place after the end of DS9 (even under an altered timeline) with mostly canon characters.

And this was really well done.

I guess it's unlikely we'll see more of it, but that's really too bad.
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Old August 29 2013, 12:01 AM   #57
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I have enjoyed this too, and wish to thank DGP for his work. It is a slight concern however that his last post above seems to be his last appearance on trekbbs. hopefully he is well and feels able to come back at some point.
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Old August 29 2013, 03:27 AM   #58
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I'd call it DoublePLUSgood.
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