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Old February 22 2012, 02:41 PM   #1
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First Born (February 2012 Challenge Entry)

The docent at the Temporal Museum on Lafa II stood in front of a small group and lectured. She had a small knife in her hands a dagger, really. Behind her, an old-fashioned clock a conceit of the museums director scrolled past the time 1300 hours and the very old-fashioned date October tenth of 3101.

Id like to talk about the Empress Hoshi Sato, said the docent, who had an arm patch on the side of her uniform that said E. Daniels. Eleanor was an expert on the Terran Empire, particularly the lifetime of the notorious Empress Hoshi Sato and her offspring. She had five children. There were four sons and one daughter, all the children of members of her senior staff. Kira was the eldest, the son of Tactical Officer turned babysitter Aidan MacKenzie. This knife was given to Kira on the occasion of his first birthday, and his earlier sitter, Elizabeth Cutler, helped train him with it until, that is, he stabbed her with it repeatedly, when he was five years old. She was the first person he ever murdered.

She paused for a moment, as if shaking something very, very slight off herself, perhaps a grain of dust or sand. Then she continued. As I was saying, this knife was owned by the Empress Hoshi Satos first born, Jun, who came from unknown parentage. He was the first of her six children, five sons and one daughter. While he was a killer like many of the denizens of the other side of the pond are he never killed anyone with this particular knife. He used different instruments.

=/\=

What the devil were you thinking? Admiral Carmen Calavicci thundered. She was so loud that Temporal Agent Richard Daniels stepped back, a little unnerved.

Car

Answer me!

I, I guess I wasnt thinking.

Youre bloody well right you werent thinking! Richard, going and doing that! What the hell am I going to do? How will I explain this? I cant, I cant be saving your bacon all the time like this! You need to help me out here!

Im, Im sorry.

Sorry? Jesus H ! Richard, we have just barely gotten the mirror government to sign the temporal accords! They are going to back out; I just know it, because of your, your carelessness! They will scuttle this department, and you and I will be thrown out of work because you couldnt keep it in your pants!

Rick sighed. She was right. When she was right, she was right. Do you want me to, to resign?

Carmen looked at him. She was still livid, but her demeanor softened a little. I, please, Richard, I have been, perhaps, far too lax, and have looked the other way before. And this is how you repay me?

I didnt think the decision all the way through.

Youre damned right you didnt. And dont think there arent some effects. There are some, even if theyre not very large. When you, you hooked up with Lucretia Crossman, earlier this year, it did have some minor effects. There were little inconsistencies in the master time file, and they were put there by your actions, Richard.

He remembered Lucretia. For her, it had been 1699, and it was in what was going to become Pennsylvania. She was a Quaker widow in Penns Woods and he was, so far as she was concerned, a lonely surveyor. It was not meant to be a terribly difficult assignment. He was just escorting some historians, watching William Penn. It was so much easier than an assignment hed had in 3098, when he had gone to Pompeii in August of AD 79. For that assignment, he had run through streets that were rapidly turning into lava beds, and had watched people screaming. Men, women and children it didnt matter they were all meeting their deaths due to the wrath of Mount Vesuvius. And he wasnt allowed to save any of them.

And it had gnawed at him, as he had also watched the Enola Gay fly over Hiroshima, and witnessed the Charge of the Light Brigade and the equally hopeless siege of the Alamo and even Custers Last Stand and more and more and more. People died, either clear-eyed and aware, or cringing and blinded. It didnt matter. They were still done. It ate away at him, and it pained him, as he watched the good, the bad and the in between all succumb to history. His job was, perhaps, to be a professional witness, and he was beginning to hate that.

So when he was in 1699 Penns Woods, and an attractive young widow flirted with him, and he had some free time, he found himself suddenly in bed with her, and it made it all worthwhile again. He didnt love her, but it didnt matter. They parted positively and he was suddenly on that track.

But Lucretia turned out all right, Rick insisted.

I dont dispute that. But she wasnt supposed to be playing doctor with a surveyor. She was supposed to end up with her neighbor, Roger Allgood. And you apparently delayed that by around a year.

I guess I did, he admitted.

And then there was, let me see, ah, yes, Phillipa Green. Carmen banged away on a PADD in order to check the specifics.

That mission had been to observe a man who the crew of the old NX-01 had referred to as Future Guy. He Jim Horan was busy giving orders to the Suliban in 2151, as a part of the Temporal Cold War. And he had an assistant Phillipa who just so happened to be a descendant of the notorious Colonel Phillip Green. She was not just Horans assistant. But Rick had made it a point of spending more than a little time with her, and it had naught to do with his actual mission.

Yes, I was with her, he said.

Right. And she and Horan were supposed to ride off into the sunset and stop their nonsense. That, too, was delayed, but by less time, at least, than how the widow Crossman was put right. Oh, and then, Dana MacKenzie, am I right?

Yes, on the Enterprise-E. More angry smacking away on an innocent piece of equipment.

And she was lured away from First Officer Martin Madden for a few weeks there. Little changes, yes, but these are changes to the master time file nonetheless. But not as bad as Betty Tyler.

Right, he sighed, That was; Ill admit that was a bad one.

1929, New Jersey. All you were supposed to do was watch the Stock Market crash and, instead, you spend your time looking up that little flappers feather boa. I dont suppose itdve been such a problem except the poor girl tried to overdose on opium after you left.

I know, I know, he said, but I went back and then all I did was observe that time, and that fixed it. Am I right?

You are, Carmen allowed, so are you saying that if I send you back to January of 2156, youll look and not touch when it comes to the Empress? Or at least youll take the damned birth control shot before you head in? Because Im telling you, Richard, the mirror governments liaison, you know that he gets the readouts of temporal changes, just like we do. They are watching us like a hawk. And they know that you have begat, she chuckled a little at using the biblical euphemism, a temporally paradoxical child.

Let me, let me think about it. I need to speak with someone.

Richard! she exclaimed, This is highly confidential. She shook her head.

My sister. Can I talk to her? Ill swear her to secrecy, all right?

All right, Carmen said finally, sighing, but you tell no one else, and I mean that. Or youll be gone from here and well go back and repair everything without your knowledge or consent or complicity. Capiche?

Yeah.

=/\=

Rick beamed over to Lafa II in time to see Eleanor finishing up with a tour group. Got a minute, sis? he asked, after he had kissed her on the cheek.

Sure, she said, putting the little knife back in its case. Ive just been talking about Jun; the Empress Hoshi Satos first born.

Jun?

Yes, Jun. Hes, uh, hes a bit of a cypher. No one seems to know who his father was. But the other five, those are fairly well known, or can be reasonably guessed at.

He steered her over to her office. What can you tell me about Jun?

He was Emperor after Hoshi died, and he had killed all of his male siblings. His name the Empress, she had been a linguist, and so all of her childrens names were meaningful. Jun means truthful.

Is there a picture?

Sure. She produced one on her PADD. Why such an interest in what I do for a living?

Uh, El, can I tell you something in confidence?

You always can. Whats the big mystery?

I, uh, I know who Juns father was.

Oh? Then youve solved a great historians puzzle. The press will be very interested.

No. No one can know.

You look strange, Rick.

El, Im his father. Im, uh, Im Jun Satos father.

She burst out laughing and then looked at his face and saw how serious he was. Wait, youre not kidding.

No, Im not. Nobody can know. Not even Mom and Dad. They cant know they have a grandson who, uh, who probably died a good seven hundred years ago or so.

More like nearly eight hundred fifty. He died in 2258. She sat down at her desk and motioned to a chair on the other side of it. Look, I remember when you confided to me about Betty Tyler. But this, this is so much more. What, uh, they are allowing it?

I dont know if they will, he said, but, uh, I didnt, I mean, I didnt mean for Hoshi to get pregnant. And I was stupid. It was barely a choice. She just, she beckoned and I followed. But, damn, I couldve prevented this.

She could have stopped it though, too, right? And she did not. So here you are. I am guessing were in the middle then, right? Where you dont know what the Temporal Integrity Commission will allow.

Its not them as much as its the mirror government. This changes the history of the Terran Empire. Kira is supposed to be Emperor. He is supposed to be the first born, and not Jun. He, he killed his babysitter Beth Cutler and some others, but he let his brothers live.

Thats different from Jun. He murdered all of them. And Beth Cutler was, well, she was just a Tactical crewman. She was nothing to him.

El, I never thought about this before. I never thought about the consequences of my actions. And this is one big, fat consequence. But the more I think about it, the more I realize that Jun, well, he didnt ask to be automatically put into a predicament like this. I, I think I want him to live. But Im not sure about how to go about that.

Hes a paradox, right? Older than you.

Yep.

So if he had kids, that would compound things, right?

Definitely.

I dont know anything about what the mirror government might want, but I can bet you anything that they dont want this all to be compounded exponentially, Eleanor said.

Right. I, uh, I should go. And youre giving me some food for thought. But no matter what, I figure, if Im going to make a case for him to survive, hell have to be sterilized. Rick shook his head. Taking that away from Jun without so much as a by your leave was giving him a headache and making him even more uncomfortable.

At the very least, Id say.

=/\=

Back at Headquarters, Carmen paced while Richard put on the last bit of decoration that went along with a full-dress uniform. Jimenez isnt going to like it if were late, she said, Do you know who his counterpart is?

Not a clue, Rick fiddled with his collar, frowning at his own reflection in a wall mirror.

Ray Jimenez, at least the one from our pet universe, was my predecessor. He was drummed out of the Temporal Integrity Commission for too many distracting nights in an affair with a high-up Federation official. It was a gay affair, too, and the official was married to a woman at the time. Very big deal, lots of nasty, gossipy press. The Commission and the Federation both hate that. So every time I see the Jimenez from the other side of the pond; I cant help but to think about that. I do my damnedest not to burst out laughing, thinking of our sides Ray playing at, well, you dont want to know.

Huh, why does the mirror even have a liaison with access to the master time file? None of the species we work with have that. He kept playing with the collar, and it was refusing to cooperate.

Theyre paranoid, she said, They think were out to ruin their timeline. And, well, this kind of an incident only serves to fuel that paranoia. Richard, I recognize that this job comes with a lot of nasty moral problems. And I admit Ive been less than sympathetic, and have just thrown you back out there, over and over again when perhaps youd have done well to have taken a little time off. Im certain that finding comfort in the arms of the women you meet is your means of coping.

It is, he admitted, I have to watch people die. I have to watch them be ruined. Except for Penns Woods, it seems as if no one ever wants to observe happy history. They only want to see suffering. And then the historians go on their merry way. I think they see it as a movie or something, like it isnt real. Well, it is. Its real. I can never shake that knowledge, that Im watching very real people at their worst.

Your humanitys now gotten us into a spot of trouble. But at least you are human. I do wonder bout Jimenez and his kind sometimes.

All right, he said, Im as pretty as Ill ever be.

Which way do you want to go with this?

I want Jun to live, Carmen. Can you help me?

Huh. On the other side they have the Y Chromosome Skew, as you know. Three-quarters of their children are male; everyones heavily dosed with testosterone and all of that. Its highly likely to be the cause of much of their aggression. But they can also be old softies when it comes to their children. Its one of the few things to recommend the other side, for much of its history. Perhaps an appeal to him based on that would help. I dont know. Wed have to play it by ear.

Carmen, I dont know what to say.

She sighed heavily. This was not going to be easy. Just let me do most of the talking.

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Old February 22 2012, 02:42 PM   #2
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Ray Jimenez was the liaison for the mirror government. He stood to greet them. There was a little courtyard garden in the center of HQ, and they were meeting there. No one else was around. Are you sure this is quiet enough? Rick asked.

No one will be here. I even got that amateur Ferengi gardener to lay off, Ray said.

Now Rick knew it was even more serious, for Von hated to leave roses in bloom, even to time travel.

Now, youll go back and undo everything, right? Ray said, And then well be all set. Just sign here, here and here. He presented a PADD.

Whats this? Carmen asked.

Its a promise that he never pulls a stunt like this again in our universe. Whatever you might do on this side of the pond, he sniffed a little, with the implication being that it was somehow the inferior side of things, well, thats your mess. But you dont screw up the Terran Empire. Just clean up this little irregularity and well call it square.

Irregularity? Rick asked, bristling a bit. My child isnt just some irregularity.

Now, now, Richard, Carmen said, It was a poor choice of words. Really, Mister Jimenez, do try to be a bit more sensitive.

No matter how I dress it up, this is still a problem, and it still needs to be fixed, post haste. That child cannot be allowed to live.

So youd just have me erase him from existence? Just go back, spend my time in the Mess Hall instead of with Hoshi and thats it?

Well, yes.

Not a chance. I want Jun to live.

It messes up the timeline! Dont you see? Admiral, this man is supposed to be a Senior Temporal Agent, is he not? Carmen nodded, so Ray continued, So why the hell is he acting like a newbie?

He is affected, she said, on your side; I know that you have a lot of very good fathers. Dont tell me that a bonding doesnt happen between a father and his child. I happen to know that it does. Have you not felt it?

I have no children, Ray said, and I was tested I dont have the Y Chromosome Skew. There are still plenty of us left who dont have that three thousand year old genetic mutation. But even if I did, I would recognize that this is wrong. Are you, do you imagine youll marry this woman? Are you is it, he sneered, love or some other weak and soft motivation?

We dont prescribe to your Five Signs of Weakness, Carmen said, and even if we did, it would not matter. Your side acts to preserve children. You do it to forward the interests of your state. So why wouldnt the existence of Jun Daniels pardon me, Sato why wouldnt that further the states own interests?

Kira MacKenzie Sato is the one, true successor Emperor after the Great Empress. There is no one else. The existence of Jun kills off Kiras ambitions completely. Hell, it kills off Kira himself. We cannot have that. Not to mention the fact that the whole thing risks all sorts of rips in the timeline.

You mean the fact that he can father a child, Rick said.

Precisely, Ray said, there may be a bastard child in there, to challenge the next Emperor, Hoshis daughter Takaras grandson. Were not sure, but the percentage chances favor that possibility.

What if Jun were sterilized? Carmen asked, Would that be enough to allow him to live?

No, Jimenez said.

Why the hell not? Rick asked.

We considered that first, and have run every possible scenario. He still murders Kira.

What if we shored up Kira somehow? Carmen asked, Maybe found some way to make him more, I dunno, more confident?

Jimenez punched a few keys on his PADD. No, no, its not enough. Kira is still killed in over ninety percent of the scenarios.

What if Kiras father was around more? Rick asked. I know my own father being around has helped me, and probably in ways I cant imagine. Kiras father had the skew, right? And I dont.

Yes, Aidan MacKenzie had the skew, Jimenez confirmed, And it can be of some help but, he hit a few keys on a PADD and it compiled the scenarios quickly, were still at a nearly eighty percent chance that Kira would be killed by Jun.

What are the differences? Carmen asked.

There are thousands, Ray said, really, youre stalling. We cannot be wasting our time going through every possible little scenario.

Just the big differences, she said, getting as annoyed with him as she was with Rick, I dont give a rats arse if they ate different breakfasts on some random Thursday in 2173.

Hmm, Ray checked, Cutler is one difference.

What happens if the difference is split, and Cutler becomes the sitter for both of them? Rick asked.

Huh, thats odd. In several scenarios, Cutlers gone not too long after Jun turns one. It looks like she escapes off the Defiant to some planet.

And then Kira has no chance to knife her, right? Carmen said. She began checking her PADD as well. Looks like our odds are a bit better, closer to seventy percent now.

Its still unacceptable. Were wasting time.

We have infinite time, dont we? Rick said.

I suppose, Ray conceded. He clicked around some more. Taking away Cutler, and making her only Juns sitter doesnt help anything. Jun is still overly confident, and goes after Kira first when he seizes power after Hoshis death.

Wouldnt he be less confident if his father were never around? Carmen asked, a plan forming in her head.

What? Rick asked, This is my kid were talking about. I want to try to be there, in some way or another.

Ray ran a bunch of scenarios. If Juns father is absent throughout his life, Jun apparently becomes less confident in his ability to rule on his own. Hmm, it looks like, this is interesting.

Ah, ha! Carmen smiled, looking at her own PADD.

Clue me in, all right? Rick said.

Tandem rule, she said, showing him her PADD. We dont get one Emperor after Hoshis death. We get two, if we sterilize Jun and keep you out, Aidan in, and Cutler departs just after Jun turns one. They rule together until Kiras death, then Jun rules on his own until his own death. Hes succeeded by the right person, their sister Takaras grandson.

What does this mean? Rick asked.

It means you never contact him. If you wish for him to live, that will have to be the condition, that you never have contact with Jun, ever. Im sorry, she said.

Hes my son!

And hes temporally paradoxical, Jimenez reminded him. These are the consequences of your carelessness, Agent Daniels.

It does bring it down to only a twenty percent chance of Jun killing Kira. Those are very good odds, you know, Carmen said.

It would be best if that number were zero, Jimenez sniffed.

Now wait a second! I thought we were all set! Rick was beginning to feel queasy. Nothing seemed to be going right.

You created this mess, Jimenez said, and I am not going to rest until its fully resolved. Now, lets see, the chances of Jun killing Kira are considerably higher when Jun is, hmm, eighty-nine years old.

Eighty-nine? Rick asked, What could possibly happen then that would trigger that?

Hang on, Carmen said as she clicked. There. Its Hoshis death.

Its not just her death. Its a visitor to her death bed. Ray ran the scenarios. Its you, Daniels. It seems like you never learn to stay away.

What?

It looks like there are a lot of chances that you would go there to make your good-byes, and then your boy gets his mojo back, Carmen said.

We cant have that, Ray said, One of the conditions will have to be that you never, ever contact Empress Hoshi during her lifetime. Not even at its very end, or even before she conceived Jun in the first place. We also dont want to risk another child being created, you know.

Rick swallowed hard. So, let me see if Ive got this straight. Jun becomes sterile. He and Kira and the others are mainly raised by Kiras father as the babysitter. And I dont get a chance to ever see Jun or Hoshi, ever. Is, is that it? Or do you want another pound of flesh out of me, you bastard?

Now, now, Richard, Mister Jimenez here is doing his best to be accommodating. Carmen turned to Ray. Are you absolutely certain?

Theres a zero percent chance of Kira dying any way other than in his own bed, Ray said, clicking and looking over the figures.

I could see to the sterilization myself, personally, Carmen said, Oh, dont look at me like that, Richard. Ive time traveled before, you know. Ill even give a cover story so as to fake your death. Then well have crossed the Rubicon and you really wont be able to go back, ever. Are we in agreement?

My government will accept this, Ray said.

And you, Richard? Carmen asked, again, in a surprisingly gentle tone of voice.

I, I guess so.

She awkwardly patted his arm. Theres a good soldier.

=/\=

Carmen stepped off a time portal a few days afterwards. The deed is done. It was just the application of the tiniest bit of delta radiation, and were all set with the sterilization. It was in utero hell never miss it, never even know hes got anything to miss. Hes still functional, of course. Plus I set up a bit of wreckage on Daranaea.

Daranaea?

Yes, our fox-faced friends never suspected a thing. It was all nicely burned up, and they certainly didnt want to go nosing around in there. The story is that your shuttle crash-landed there. The Empress accepted it. Funny, the Empress called you Ritchie, not Rick.

Yeah, she called me that.

Did you love her?

No, he said quickly, but I cant help but to love my own child.

Understood, Carmen said, again surprisingly gently. Ill have to hire someone, at some point, to handle mirror universe missions during Jun and Hoshis lifetimes, but I dont see any reason why you cant go to that side of the pond in, say, 500 BC or some such.

Right, he said, and walked with her back to their offices, as he decided that, any time he was in the mirror, from then on, that he would remember and, in commemoration, he would call himself Ritchie.

=/\=

Back at the museum a few days later, he stood back and watched as Eleanor talked to another tour group, little knife in her hands again. This knife, she said, was owned by the Empress Hoshi Sato. She gave it to her first born son, Jun, on the occasion of his first birthday. Jun was under the care of babysitter Elizabeth Cutler then, but not too long afterwards, Cutler departed with the Chief Engineer, Charles Tucker III. Hoshi replaced Cutler with Aidan MacKenzie, and soon had his son, who she named Kira. She had four other children three boys, and a girl. The one girl, Takara, married the son of Cutler and Tucker, a fellow named Charles Tucker IV. Now, it was Jun and Kira who, ruling together, succeeded Hoshi, with the help of their brothers Arashi and Izo. Arashi did the books while Izo ran the secret police. Takara and her twin brother, Takeo, didnt take part in ruling, as they had only recently been picked up from the surface of Lafa II, the very planet youre standing on right now. When Kira died, Jun was the sole ruler of the Terran Empire, and on his deathbed he designated his successor, Charles Tucker VI, who we all know from history as the Emperor Charles I.

A Tandaran man in her tour group asked, For most of the Empresss children, paternity is known, or can be inferred. But not for her first born, Jun. Does anyone know who his father is?

She looked beyond the Tandaran, straight at Richard, and said, His father is unknown, and probably always will be. A pity, for a child should know his father. And the father, I am sure, wanted to know his son.

Rick swallowed hard. Hed have to live with the consequences. But at least there would be a Jun. It meant truthful an absurdity considering the number of lies being told to assure his survival. Rick looked at a museum display of pictures of the Empresss family, lingering on one such photograph. My boy, he said softly, My first born.

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Sounds like these people are in dire need of Sam Beckett's turning-wrong-to-right touch.

I love the nods to Quantum Leap, by the way, the name of Admiral Calavicci and the fact that she keeps checking her PADD just like Al did. Cool stuff!
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Thank you very much.

I wanted this to be a bit of QL in reverse - they end up putting something wrong, when you get down to it, although it's for (semi-) noble reasons.

Plus, yes, Carmen's meant to have a fairly short attention span (but not necessarily Al's fantastic wardrobe).
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Thank you very much.

I wanted this to be a bit of QL in reverse - they end up putting something wrong, when you get down to it, although it's for (semi-) noble reasons.
Yeah, it is a sort of QL in reverse. I'd never thought about how temporal agents deal with their unusual jobs on a personal level, how that affects their lives. I guess it's natural for them to occasionally become more attached to the people they meet than their mission would allow. I'll have to say, though, your Agent Daniels is quite the ladies man, and across the ages, no less!

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Plus, yes, Carmen's meant to have a fairly short attention span (but not necessarily Al's fantastic wardrobe).
Well, it's not like Starfleet allows much room for developing a fashion sense like Al's. Although, that would be interesting to see. Trip's Hawaiian shirt comes to mind right about now.
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Ah, the Hawaiian shirt! Something tells me Carmen wouldn't wear one.

What I wanted to get across (in part) is that this isn't Sam Beckett's nice, neat happy ending much of the time. So how do people cope? And then what happens when it really goes (to quote Al) ca-ca?
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Ah, the Hawaiian shirt! Something tells me Carmen wouldn't wear one.
Well no, I don't imagine she would.

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What I wanted to get across (in part) is that this isn't Sam Beckett's nice, neat happy ending much of the time. So how do people cope? And then what happens when it really goes (to quote Al) ca-ca?
Yeah, that's some food for thought right there.
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That was a damn good story. You are developing your Mirror universe quite nicely.
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Old February 29 2012, 10:22 PM   #9
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Thank you very much - and of course the same Izo from Coveted Commodity is mentioned here, off-handedly.
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