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Old July 14 2009, 01:07 PM   #16
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Re: July Challenge Entry--A Stone's Throw Away

That was wonderful. I'm very moved, and I'd like to say I think you are a great story-teller. This was to a standard most definitely worthy of an actual published author. There's nothing more important to me than the bond between mutually loving parents and children, which I consider sacred, and to me you really captured that.
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Old July 14 2009, 03:05 PM   #17
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That was wonderful. I'm very moved, and I'd like to say I think you are a great story-teller. This was to a standard most definitely worthy of an actual published author. There's nothing more important to me than the bond between mutually loving parents and children, which I consider sacred, and to me you really captured that.
Yeah, I have to agree with Nesat..this was very well told. One of your best, and very 'pro-ish' in feel. Bravo zulu!!! the connection was SO there.

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Old July 14 2009, 05:47 PM   #18
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Thanks for your kindness, and nice to see you, guys!

I was very fortunate, of course, that the character of Berat had been created in Ms. Tilton's novel, and the basic outline of his past established. But to me, those were a few sentences that REALLY deserved more exploration than they got, so once I saw Steff's fanart, it compelled me to write the story.
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Old July 15 2009, 12:35 AM   #19
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Nerys, outta curiosity...have you considered writing pro-Trek?
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Old July 15 2009, 01:23 AM   #20
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Nerys, outta curiosity...have you considered writing pro-Trek?
Before everything started to fall into one novel-continuity...yes. But now that it's all under one continuity, one that has taken directions I do not agree with...absolutely NOT. I want the kind of creative freedom that no longer exists if you write the officially-licensed stuff.
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Old July 15 2009, 11:27 AM   #21
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Re: July Challenge Entry--A Stone's Throw Away

Nerys Ghemor wrote: View Post
Rush Limborg wrote: View Post
Nerys, outta curiosity...have you considered writing pro-Trek?
Before everything started to fall into one novel-continuity...yes. But now that it's all under one continuity, one that has taken directions I do not agree with...absolutely NOT. I want the kind of creative freedom that no longer exists if you write the officially-licensed stuff.
What about writing in the Abramsverse? There's a whole new continuity there.
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Old July 15 2009, 02:35 PM   #22
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Re: July Challenge Entry--A Stone's Throw Away

BrotherBenny wrote: View Post
Nerys Ghemor wrote: View Post
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Nerys, outta curiosity...have you considered writing pro-Trek?
Before everything started to fall into one novel-continuity...yes. But now that it's all under one continuity, one that has taken directions I do not agree with...absolutely NOT. I want the kind of creative freedom that no longer exists if you write the officially-licensed stuff.
What about writing in the Abramsverse? There's a whole new continuity there.
That's an good notion actually. (And I think NG has already touch upon it)
I do have my own ideas for the new time line, but give the rate at which I write it may be some time before they come to fruition.

I also own a huge apology to Neryrs Ghemor for not commenting on this fine piece of writing. The way that you have managed to capture the dichotomy of duty to the state (either willingly or coerced) and to the family is a testament to your impeccable skills as an author.
I believe that it was once said by one of our most famous poets that there are times that try men's souls, I think that for Berat this was one of those make or break times in his short life.
It definitely makes Gul Tyben Berat one of the most inspirational Cardassians in the trekverse.

Finally I want to join the chorus urging you to write the next great Cardassian novel.
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Old July 15 2009, 03:41 PM   #23
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I would also like to say, that given your superb writing skills, you could easily create a quasi-reptilian world/universe of your own for a new original science fiction series. Who says it has to be based on humans?
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Old July 15 2009, 04:12 PM   #24
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Thor Damar wrote: View Post
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Before everything started to fall into one novel-continuity...yes. But now that it's all under one continuity, one that has taken directions I do not agree with...absolutely NOT. I want the kind of creative freedom that no longer exists if you write the officially-licensed stuff.
What about writing in the Abramsverse? There's a whole new continuity there.
That's an good notion actually. (And I think NG has already touch upon it)
I do have my own ideas for the new time line, but give the rate at which I write it may be some time before they come to fruition.
This is the problem I would have...there are already Trek XI books written and that will be coming to press soon. And where I picture the Abramsverse going is very specific. So I would still rather not go professional.

I also own a huge apology to Neryrs Ghemor for not commenting on this fine piece of writing. The way that you have managed to capture the dichotomy of duty to the state (either willingly or coerced) and to the family is a testament to your impeccable skills as an author.
I believe that it was once said by one of our most famous poets that there are times that try men's souls, I think that for Berat this was one of those make or break times in his short life.
It definitely makes Gul Tyben Berat one of the most inspirational Cardassians in the trekverse.

Finally I want to join the chorus urging you to write the next great Cardassian novel.
Sorry, Thor, but you can't claim credit for that "poet's quote." That would be American revolutionary Thomas Paine. Nice try, though, Mr. Brit.

And thank you very much for reading...I'm glad you liked it. Berat's one of those characters that even in the bad times, I really enjoy writing because I can almost feel his strength as I do so. There's always this sense of "this COULD have broken him..." But it doesn't.

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I would also like to say, that given your superb writing skills, you could easily create a quasi-reptilian world/universe of your own for a new original science fiction series. Who says it has to be based on humans?
LOL, well, I'd always be feeling like they're Cardassians in disguise! And goodness knows I've got quite the attachment to that grey-scaled species!
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Old July 15 2009, 04:36 PM   #25
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Sorry, Thor, but you can't claim credit for that "poet's quote." That would be American revolutionary Thomas Paine. Nice try, though, Mr. Brit.
Ah my dear Nerys Ghemor, I think we're both right. For you see although Thomas Paine was a revolutionary (and one of the highest caliber) he was a Brit, just a very forward thinking one who rejected the reactionary ruling class of his native land.

And he wasn't the only one there were numinous riots againist the regime and massive support for both the American and French revolutions.
In fact Mr Paine was voted one of the greatest Britons a few years ago.

So in summation he was a limey revolutionary who played a key role in the American revoultion and we all love him for that.
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Old July 16 2009, 12:16 AM   #26
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Well, you may be able to write a parallel universe story in an anthology...

And wonderful, wonderful story NG.
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Old July 20 2009, 07:30 PM   #27
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Excellent story! Poignant and very well-written.
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Old July 21 2009, 01:53 AM   #28
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Thank you much for reading.
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Old July 30 2009, 06:11 AM   #29
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You have a way with words, and with Cardassians. Superb. I look forward to reading more. One day I may even work up the nerve to try a fan fic of my own. I like to write. I've just always been very leery of writing already established characters or worlds, because people have definite ideas about who someone is or how something is. Nonetheless, you're quite the inspiration with your craft.
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Old July 30 2009, 07:12 AM   #30
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You should give it a try someday.

And thank you very much for your kind words, and for reading!

(Berat, however, was originally established in the novel Betrayal, so I can't take full credit for him. What happens to him after that novel, though--that's mine.)
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