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View Poll Results: Do you like my poetry?
Publish! 5 55.56%
Kind of 1 11.11%
I can't be bovvered 0 0%
Perish! 3 33.33%
Voters: 9. You may not vote on this poll

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Old February 28 2009, 09:50 AM   #1
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My Poetry--Give your honest opinion!

I present to you, Trekbbs, my creation, for your judgment.

Should I publish?

Perish?

Are you in the "ehhhhh" camp?

Please share your thoughts, now that I have lost my floss!

PPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPOEM:

i do not know
where they have gone
my drunkl threads
the poetry of my self expression
gone
eaten by the abyss
taken by the trekbbs
i do not know
where they are
but i miss them
i do
and if I could
recover each one
i would
from the depths of the sea
of the heights of the stratosphere
where are you,
my drunkl threads?
how i miss you so!
so
i must create new
where the old
once was
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Old February 28 2009, 09:52 AM   #2
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Re: My Poetry--Give your honest opinion!

don't know how i got so many P's btw--my keyboard must have taken on a life of its own!

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yes!
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Old February 28 2009, 10:55 AM   #3
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Re: My Poetry--Give your honest opinion!

I think you should read that poem at Obama's next inauguration.
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Old February 28 2009, 11:01 AM   #4
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Re: My Poetry--Give your honest opinion!

It's all in the delivery.
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Old February 28 2009, 11:08 AM   #5
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Re: My Poetry--Give your honest opinion!

Warning for leaking a BR Thread. Comments to PM.

Oh, well, if you can do it I can do it:

RJDiogenes wrote:

Drunkl Threads are gone?
Maybe they are sober now.
Or in the drunk tank.

***

Once we had some Threads that were drunkl
But into the abyss they sunkl
That's bad news
So have some more booze
And get yourself out of your funkl

***

Oh, where, oh where
Have our drunkl Threads gone
I think they've all
passed out on the lawn




* Bows. *
Remember, kids, I'm a professional. Don't try this at home.
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Old February 28 2009, 03:44 PM   #6
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Re: My Poetry--Give your honest opinion!

Top41 wrote: View Post
I present to you, Trekbbs, my creation, for your judgment.

Should I publish?

Perish?

Are you in the "ehhhhh" camp?

Please share your thoughts, now that I have lost my floss!

PPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPOEM:
That was awesome. Abstract, thoughtful, full of meaning and soul - the psyche of a puzzled lyricist and artist, bared for all to see. The last killer line is incredible.

i do not know
where they have gone
my drunkl threads
the poetry of my self expression
gone
eaten by the abyss
taken by the trekbbs
i do not know
where they are
but i miss them
i do
and if I could
recover each one
i would
from the depths of the sea
of the heights of the stratosphere
where are you,
my drunkl threads?
how i miss you so!
so
i must create new
where the old
once was
That was not too bad either. I could definitely sense a feeling of sadness at the thought of a remarkable loss, with a hint of wonder, curiosity, childlike innocence and awe in the lyric there.
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Old February 28 2009, 03:48 PM   #7
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Re: My Poetry--Give your honest opinion!

You are the next Maya Angelou.

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Old February 28 2009, 03:55 PM   #8
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Re: My Poetry--Give your honest opinion!

I kinda like it. Of course you will need more than one poem to publish and one reasonably good poem might just be a fluke. I need to see more of your poetry. Maybe you could write a couple about some ofthe more colorful Trekbbs members. Maybe even a T'Bonz poem?
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Old February 28 2009, 03:57 PM   #9
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Re: My Poetry--Give your honest opinion!

its always best to keep a copy of what you write. do you have much other stuff this is abt specific to the form
I use Triond for feedback on work
www.triond.com/users/Nathan+Grace

Heres my profile page do poetry and have a bit of star trek humour
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Old February 28 2009, 03:58 PM   #10
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Miss Chicken wrote: View Post
I need to see more of your poetry. Maybe you could write a couple about some ofthe more colorful Trekbbs members. Maybe even a T'Bonz poem?
I like this idea. Call it Old Ravescene's Book of Practical TrekBBS Members.
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