I present to you, Trekbbs, my creation, for your judgment. Should I publish? Perish? Are you in the "ehhhhh" camp? Please share your thoughts, now that I have lost my floss! PPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPOEM:
don't know how i got so many P's btw--my keyboard must have taken on a life of its own! dfafhoa adaf yes!
Warning for leaking a BR Thread. Comments to PM. Oh, well, if you can do it I can do it: Remember, kids, I'm a professional. Don't try this at home.
That was awesome. Abstract, thoughtful, full of meaning and soul - the psyche of a puzzled lyricist and artist, bared for all to see. The last killer line is incredible. That was not too bad either. I could definitely sense a feeling of sadness at the thought of a remarkable loss, with a hint of wonder, curiosity, childlike innocence and awe in the lyric there.
I kinda like it. Of course you will need more than one poem to publish and one reasonably good poem might just be a fluke. I need to see more of your poetry. Maybe you could write a couple about some ofthe more colorful Trekbbs members. Maybe even a T'Bonz poem?
its always best to keep a copy of what you write. do you have much other stuff this is abt specific to the form I use Triond for feedback on work www.triond.com/users/Nathan+Grace Heres my profile page do poetry and have a bit of star trek humour