January Challenge - Across the Road

Discussion in 'Fan Fiction' started by SLWalker, Jan 7, 2009.

  1. SLWalker

    SLWalker The OG Scotty Fangirl Premium Member

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    Title: Across the Road
    Series: ST:TOS, Arc of the Wolf
    Timeline: 2286, just before ST:IV
    Words: 970
    Disclaimer: They are all Paramount's, not mine.
    Notes: It's... something. I don't even quite know what. It's also out of context. The song is 'One Step Closer' by U2.

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    Pulled for story control.
     
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  2. Mistral

    Mistral Vice Admiral Admiral

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    Is this your Jan entry? Cause I'm willing to concede now if it is....
     
  3. SLWalker

    SLWalker The OG Scotty Fangirl Premium Member

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    LOL! It is, but no concessions allowed.
     
  4. CeJay

    CeJay Rear Admiral Rear Admiral

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    Nobody seems to write internal struggle and anguish quite like you do. While readings this I was actually thinking: Damn, I should try something like this once.

    Very nicely done.
     
  5. SLWalker

    SLWalker The OG Scotty Fangirl Premium Member

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    One brilliant author who goes well above anything I can hope to is Norman Maclean who wrote 'A River Runs Through It'. If I have any competency at it, it's only because I've studied a true master.

    Thanks so much, CeJay.
     
  6. Count Zero

    Count Zero No nation but procrastination Moderator

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    Wow, great little story. Excellent writing. I have the feeling we already have a winner for this contest...
     
  7. SLWalker

    SLWalker The OG Scotty Fangirl Premium Member

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    LOL! I doubt it. ;) There are so many excellent authors here that I'll be lucky if I place in the top three. But thank you very much for the vote of confidence.
     
  8. trampledamage

    trampledamage Clone Admiral

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    I love how you are able to so believably get inside the quiet moments for the Trek characters. Scotty's reaction to the loss of the Enterprise is never shown in the movies but it must have been a powerfully emotional experience for him - but I can completely believe he would hide all that because there was work to be done.

    btw - thank you for entering so early - you've inspired me to think of a story (whether I'll get it written is another matter).
     
  9. SLWalker

    SLWalker The OG Scotty Fangirl Premium Member

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    Thank you very much, and I hope you manage to get yours written! I'll definitely look forward to it.
     
  10. Nerys Ghemor

    Nerys Ghemor Vice Admiral Admiral

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    Very well done...a very fitting experience reading this with the song playing.

    Trampledamage and CeJay really hit the nail on the head...I repeat their comments. :)
     
  11. SLWalker

    SLWalker The OG Scotty Fangirl Premium Member

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    Thank you!
     
  12. Starkers

    Starkers Admiral Admiral

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    Very nice story, not often we get into Scotty's head. Well done :bolian:
     
  13. SLWalker

    SLWalker The OG Scotty Fangirl Premium Member

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    ::coughs:: I spend an absurd amount of time wandering around his headspace. It's more than a little fascinating -- just when you think you've got every single thing figured out, some other facet comes to light.

    Thank you very much!
     
  14. DavidFalkayn

    DavidFalkayn Commodore Commodore

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    A fitting tribute to both Scotty and James Doohan. The old warhorse who's always there, always reliable, who never gives up, and never asks for any praise or recognition for what he's done--the mere fact that the job is done is good enough for him.
     
  15. mirandafave

    mirandafave Fleet Captain Fleet Captain

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    That was simply beautiful and serenely touching. An emotional time for all the crew but again you've just nailed down the external and internal Scotty. Much praise and congratulations for a fine piece of writing and an excellent song choice.

    Early days I know but we might be 'One Step Closer' to a winner ...
     
  16. SLWalker

    SLWalker The OG Scotty Fangirl Premium Member

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    I don't know if I would say that it's entirely fair, what the universe ends up doing to him, but I will say that he's at least stalwart through it. Thanks for the comments!

    LOL! It's only the tenth, and you lot are all fabulous writers. I still will be surprised if I even place. And thank you for the comment, very much.
     
  17. Kaziarl

    Kaziarl Commodore Commodore

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    Your stuff is great IMO. I wish my stuff was a fraction as good, but in the mean time I'm happy if I get one done on time.
     
  18. SLWalker

    SLWalker The OG Scotty Fangirl Premium Member

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    I'm sure your stuff is fine. :P And thank you for the comment.