A project I have began only thirty minutes ago, but should prove to be quite something. A teaser for now... http://www.b3tards.com/u/b344d5b52973a0a678c2/cityedgeforever.png
No offense, but why waste our time with this? Golly, you've put a whole 30 minutes into it and shown us a title card. Big whoop.
A wild guess here... A CGI "ruins" scene, expanding the TOS "City" into a real "lost city" situation? That would be cool to see. On the other hand... a "cadet" with no "street rep" in here comes in and tosses out a grenade without giving us any idea who he (or she) is, and what he (or she) is doing? Yeah, damned hard to get excited. So... tell us more, or don't tell us anything (yet).
Let's dial back the condescension, folks. Some folks are still enthusiastic about this stuff and haven't become so cynical - you might try some encouragement or curiosity, not just childishness. Remember: keep the criticism constructive .
I would like to suggest something: the lettering style is wrong. TOS' first year titling was not in the highly stylized "STAR TREK" typography, but rather in a softer kind.
I'd always imagined the "City On The Edge Of Forever" as a cliff-dwelling, mesas, canyons. Somewhat modern, but somewhat underground, due to emerging from past (nuclear) disasters.
Of course, the title originally referred to a City that the crew never visits. In the original script the crew are heading towards this city when they encounter the Guardians and the time vortex. When Kirk first sees, seemingly so unreal where it is, he comments "Like a city on the edge of forever."