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Old August 8 2007, 06:59 PM   #24
TheLoneRedshirt
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Re: Chapter Two

Excellent segment! I particularly liked the on-going character development and your attention to detail on the warp-tug. You provide a vivid sense of the close quarters and worn nature of the old work-horse. Chief Prak's personality is typical Tellarite, which you have portrayed very effectively.

Marconi does not strike me as the brightest bulb in the chandelier. His antipathy toward the Cardassians is at least understandable, but he seems to play fast and loose with rules - hopefully, it doesn't get anyone killed!

And the mystery surrounding the Shepard deepens! Just what type of warp drive did the ship have!?

Nice job! :thumbsup:
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