Well, I guess it's my turn at bat. I saw ''Lolani'' on sunday but wanted to give it a repeat viewing before really going over it...
I was surprised to see that it was actually a lot better than their initial episode, and that this time they kept the TNG lovefest to a minimum.
(6) If all Orion women are slaves on her planet, how is it that Lolani mentions having a mother and father? And why is this not followed up on?
(11) Punch-out time! Ferrigno manages to easily find (?) Lolani’s quarters and gains entrance, taking advantage of a not-so-bright redshirt who needs to check in with his Captain at a comm. unit too far away (I don’t get it, security carry phasers while on duty, but don’t have a handy communicator, or even earpiece to quickly check in?). Cut to Ferrigno slapping Lolani around, allowing the so-conveniently arriving Kirk (what reason did he have to suddenly show up alone? A last smooch party with the sexy green stowaway?) a quick back-and-forth and the Hulk is on the ground, and Lolani puts her where-the-hell-did-that-come from-knife-she-somehow-reclaimed-from-security (?) is up against his throat. After all that, the redshirt who was closer we assume from Lolani’s quarters finally shows up.
(Did somebody even proofread this sequence? What a mess!)
2 final thoughts: while entertaining, the whole dinner scenario is a Picard tactic, not a Kirk one. Kirk would have confronted Ferrigno during his ship’s arrival and denied him any contact whatsoever with Lolani, and brought her to a starbase ASAP to let the diplomats resolve the potential minefields (as another mentioned, akin to Lokai and Bele, another story involving slavery!!)...
And Dr McKennah: sorry, but can a situation be any more telegraphed than this one? It’s so obvious STC is trying to reproduce Maddie and David from Moonlighting with Kirk and McKennah, aiming to get the two characters involved at some point that they are willing to completely forget the one basic truth about Kirk: that despite Janice Rand, despite Helen Noel and possibly many others,Kirk just does NOT involve himself with the women under his command...
STC seems to be going ahead with morphing itself into the Kirk and McKennah show, at the serious expense of featuring Spock and McCoy in THEIR rightful roles. I don’t know about Haberkorn, but Leonard Nimoy would never have stood for this kind of thing in his day...
Still an entertainig episode...let's keep on exploring!
To address a couple of things you mentioned:
Item #6 - Lolani was raised "off-world" by her parents. It was only after her parents got killed that she was returned to Orion and thus forced into slavery. That is why all the drama with her. She was not use to being a slave but was forced into the trade after a life of freedom. She was not the normal Orion slave girl raised in that life
Item #11 - The knife was from the Slave trader; not the knife that Lolani beamed about with. The knife is in the slave traders belt the entire time he is on board the ship and Lolani grabbed it from his belt when he was on the ground. As far as Kirk coming; it was because the security guard called him so I'm assuming he come down personally to deal with the "guest"