February 9 2014, 02:03 PM
Location: Brockville, Ontario, Canada
Re: Star Trek Continues: Episode 2 "Lolani"...
For once, it's a fanfilm ABOUT something. Bravo to that.
Waaay better than the previous installment in just about every way. In fact, it was the only fanfilm I've been able to watch without getting bored at some point (I did roll my eyes in a few places, tho). In fact, because it's a solid drama about characters, for me it tops anything NV/Phase II has done. I'll rate it against TTI when it's finally finished.
Not totally in love with the script but I admire the message it's trying to send, even if it's heavy handed in its approach.
Kirk being farsighted already...needless continuity porn. Stop it,
VFX glitch when the Enterprise first approaches the crippled ship. Watch the starfield around the ship "pop" up in brightness.
The script needed some pruning. Too wordy in places it didn't need to be. The VO as Kirk walks down the hall was unnecessary. We know what he's conflicted about, and its as if Vic didn't trust his own performance to sell the moment wordlessly. Likewise, his speech to the crew where he admits he's about to violate orders. Just do it. Stop rationalizing it, be the damned captain.
I liked how Kirk dressed down Kenway. He needs to do that with McKennah. She's insubordinate.
Stop. Calling. Home. It's one thing fanfilms do way too much. The argument over the diplomatic concerns should have been a Kirk/Spock/Bones conflict. Nice to see Erin Gray but it'd have been better drama to keep the conflicts aboard the ship.
For once, someone stops a shuttlecraft from escaping. About Vulcan time!
That said, fanfilms: stop writing redshirts as idiots.
I thought they missed an opportunity to show how even Spock's attempt to be helpful via mind meld could be seen as just one more violation by Liani. First they abuse her body and then someone gets into her mind. She acquiesced far too readily.
Bones should be spanked for not volunteering that he could inoculate the crew. Way to blow it, Doc.
One thing I fault the script for is not having the guts to make Kenway act out of a sense or morality and for simply caring about Lolani's plight without having to be in love with her. Since the pheromones were acting on him before Bones finally got around to vaccinating against it, it makes his "love" still feel a little too convenient and perhaps unreal.
Kirk was being weak in one way TOS Kirk would never have been: "Not on my ship, mister," is what he should have said in response to Zaminhon was attacking Lolani.
Zaminhon's line was a little too close to Krudge's "Because you wish it!" It jarred me out of the moment.
Great twist at the climax.
Nice that they chose to use some Jefferies designs. Sad that they felt the need to over-greeble them.
Agreed on pretty much every point.
I made one similar point in a letter to the STC production: stop trying to connect the dots. I made a point of saying, alright you've included a couple of TNG elements now leave it at that and do things the TOS way as if the other productions never happened.
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