^^^Well put, even if this thread is teetering on necro-ville.
Rule One for me re scripts is "what would people actually do?"
and the scene where everyone stands around while Kirk is in trouble rings a totally false note because no one in it acts like real friends and shipmates would.
Technobabble must die. It's a sin the original Star Trek
rarely committed but which almost all fan productions set in the same era do incessantly.
And, yes, as Middyseafort and I are always carping, let's have the LEADS motivate the action, drive the action. Hell, let's just have the character DO something and not stand around and talk about it over and over.