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Old November 17 2013, 10:22 PM   #58
BrentMc
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Re: Writing questions

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I have a few scenes that star with "Three weeks later." I have thought about switching some of them to dialogue, such as having a character say "It's been three weeks since the attack."
Talking purely as a reader here, but keep the "Three weeks later" headers. Including things like that in the dialog almost always feels forced IMO. Like the characters both actually know the info already, but know they have to tell the reader as well.
I also thought I could put it into one of my Captain's Logs. "Captain's log stardate 1234, it has been three weeks since the attack and repairs to the ship are finally complete. Tomorrow we get underway for ...."
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