! Welcome to the board! I've only been around for about a year, but I'll welcome you nonetheless!
The video was a clever concept. I think if you picked up the pace on your acting it might work even better. Or since it looks like you're working on these alone, perhaps try to find a willing friend to be your volunteer actor so you can have more fun behind the camera. But still, it's cool that you're finding a creative outlet for your ideas as a one-man-band video writer/producer/director/editor/etc on youtube. I'm impressed to see on your website that you were a writer on The Wonder Years
. That's definitely in my Netflix queue for a re-watch. Loved that show! Welcome, and have fun making videos!