An interesting start, with some rather familiar elements!
There are enough differences between this and both TV Enterprise and my own interpretation to give it it's own identity.
One major point. At one point we are told:
"We found C-7 residue on UE-One earlier today, as the chief engineer was doing a final pre-flight warp engine test on the Warp Four engine system they just installed,"
As written, there's no real explanation as to the significance of this, or what C-7 residue is. It really needs to be explained in greater detail.
And one minor point. A couple of characters are described as having brown hair, but the accompanying photos show them as blondes.
Right, let's see what's out there!