...Overall there was a little bit too much exposition here for my tastes. At some point this turned into more of a show-and-tell...
That's a valid piece of criticism. I've been struggling to get anything written for some time, total writers block. Eventually I resolved to get something, anything,
posted, even if it were little more than background information, just so I'm still in the process of actually writing.
I'm glad you enjoyed the banter, at least I'm doing something right!