I must say that I really enjoyed this volume of the Destiny trilogy, even more so than the former. The touching degeneration and redemption of Captain Hernandez as contrasted to her crew, was just some genuinely good writing all around. I think you did an excellent job of making the Captain entirely understandable while, at times, unsympathetic. A lot of what really works about ST
is the fact that you expect a lot of the usual "outs" from Star Trek to happen only they don't--leaving our heroes with "realistic" consequences for the insane situations they find themselves in.
I will say, however, my pet peeve about Star Trek politics did show up. Basically, the Thollians HORRIFIED reaction to real politc and pretending it was a personal slight. The fact we know the consequences of this and how it goes completely off the rails makes it even worse. I had a hard time wrapping my head around their perspective (giant spider brains or not). Still, awesome work.