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Old June 3 2013, 02:00 AM   #22
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Re: Phase II - Act One of "KITUMBA"

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Well, having read a JML Kitumba draft one can argue that the episode did alter the story rather significantly as is, first by crunching a 2-parter down to 1, adding characters, etc. etc. Given that, tightening and trimming the dialog wouldn't have been any bigger sin.
Right, we might not have struck the absolute best balance.
I have to give you credit for being open to critique, Greg. It's not something I see a lot. Kudos.
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