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Old May 10 2013, 02:38 PM   #1405
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Re: STAR TREK INTO DARKNESS - Grading & Discussion [SPOILERS]

Fire up the engines. Half impulse until we clear the nebula, then punch it to warp nine.
That's nothing. No gravitas. The word "punch" is just another word like the word "clear". You have to end your command with "punch it" not squash it into the middle of a sentence. You don't even want any bits of sentence in front of it, "punch it" should be a stand alone.
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