I noticed that hideous shot of from Ensigns of Command as well, my first thought was "why is the Enterprise powered down?"
Regarding the on-screen text, without pausing it to read it, I too saw a few jokes, notably something referencing "find and replace." I think I actually prefer when the leave the onscreen text as-is rather than replacing it with something more accurate to the scene, but admittedly the replaced text will likely hold up longer.
I also noticed that the dedication plaque is slightly different than the one we normally see. It only contained a single column of text at the bottom, rather than the numerous columns listing the names of the crew members from the show.
It also painfully obvious that some of the lines were redubbed when the show was first produced.