I read it last night. One nitpick:
A Unitarian Church? You had to go and make Esperanza a Unitarian of all things?
Good grief man, what happened to the Holy and Undivided Trinity in the 24th Century?
Were the Presbyterians not available?
Even if you're joking, that sort of religious bigotry is completely uncalled for. Why not
Unitarians in the 24th century? (And what, exactly, are wrong with Presbyterians?)