I haven't read many stories lately on the TrekBBS fanfic forum--and I must say this is AWESOME.
And ignore Sandoval's "advice.' Your extension of the Weyoun-Dukat bickering that we saw on the show, and your deeper look into Dukat's psychology is incredibly well done. Not to mention that you've created quite a mystery here when it comes to how fast humanity surrendered. That past must somehow hold a key to the future. And frankly, I have much more trust that the events of the Alpha Quadrant will end up connected to those outside the galaxy.