I just found this thread today. The first episode was very nicely done and I'll be watching the rest of the series as time permits. It set up an intriguing premise and was presented in a somewhat surreal, artsy format reminiscent of the 60s. I like the use of black and white. I didn't find the train scene overly long at all-- in fact, I like that the audience is assumed to have an attention span.
There's not much to complain about. The dialogue was a bit klunky on occasion ("made new ground" instead of "broke new ground," for example), but mostly well done. I had a problem hearing some of the dialogue at times, but that may be my system. I'm not sure.
Are you planning on releasing this on DVD when it's complete?