Yeah, the video is only HD by comparison to the original I posted on youtube, which is only 360p.
Yeah, the dialogue is pretty rough, and that's my voice, which I hate listening to. Tried doing some echo and distortion, but made it too hard to understand. Even now I feel like I'm loosing my "d" sounds, and therefore my past-tenses.
The dialogue will be re-recorded for the pilot episode once I have that character cast, and so I have some time to improve it.
The moons were definitely meant to look like they revolve around the planet.
As far as keeping some mystery- I agree entirely. Is there anything that jumps out as you as removable without confusing people?