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Old May 31 2012, 01:04 PM   #3
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Re: "Local Flavor" (May 2012 Out of Uniform Challenge Entry)

I loved your story, jespah! I like the idea of these two characters starting over on the other side, and the feeling that they are new to Lafa II and Lafa II is new to them. You effectively captured the freshness of their first venture into the Calafan world and I really felt like I was there with them, discovering all those unusual, but exciting market products.

You also did a fine job at painting a realistic picture of the world you set your story in. Lafa II sounds alive, real and neatly detailed.

Oh, and I love your term night people.
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