Ok I've found a major flaw in this story line. Anime and Manga are highly visual story formats. I don't have the skills for that yet and I haven't watched / read either in half a decade when I wrote the first story in this storyline. Worse, I was never good at anime. So I'm going to initiate a full retrofit on the story line and just restart later. If there are any other issues anyone sees let me know so I can fix them.