I blasted through this in one day. Mostly good stuff, although there were a couple of points that didn't quite resonate well with me.
I have a few questions. Please feel free to answer or not; it's your little corner of the universe and I don't want to poke and prod where I'm not welcome.
Nog is clearly on top, yeah. That dialogue just sort of came out while I was writing the scene, and it felt kind of natural for both characters.
Not specifically - I just didn't want a reset-button for him. (See Shanjayell's post!) So it's left there if anyone wants to make use of it in future.