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Old March 30 2011, 03:44 AM   #3
cathouse_joe
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Re: STAR TREK: RAVENLIN: THE DIEING SHORES

You don't suck. You're actually a decent writer, but isn't "dieing" spelled "dying"? Instead of "acid smoke" try "acrid smoke". I've written a few stories on AdAstra and I'd love to see your's there, too.
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