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Old August 21 2010, 06:02 PM   #40
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Re: Star Trek: Shaping a Cardassian

Beautiful Chapter! Loved that there was more Damar inside (of course) and the interaction in general between the different characters read realistic and alive (though I was a bit shocked at Jorals extrem reactions towards Ziyal, but then... guess thats cardassian), your story plot does make sense and is interessting to follow. I didnt notice your difficulties with the times, but I have not much an idea of English times myself, even weve got many times in German as well.
I could have read on and on and on ... you managed to capture my full attention with your story. Waiting impatiently for more.


P.S. Would Joral not feel disturbed knowing Damars betraying his wife? (Just wondered... cause you wrote he said to her, that Weyoun won't get suspicious seeing another lady around him.)
... Stay clear! Its the singing of things Im longing to hear. You touch them and stiff and silent they turn. Youre killing the things for whose singing I yearn!

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