Re: Star Trek: The Doomsday Machine - Special Edition Screencaps
If you really want to mix things up and provide some "never before seen footage", you might want to try reducing the number of phaser shots back to what they were originally and try punctuating them with a couple of photon torpedoes that "just bounced off". That way Sulu's reaction would make more sense and you could still bring something new and fresh to the scene. I always wondered why they didn't fire any torpedoes in that ep. This would make it clear why they wouldn't work.
I actually like the way you extended the music and lengthened the scene, even though the phasers don't seem "natural".
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