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Old July 5 2009, 01:27 PM   #62
Count Zero
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Re: Starship Enterprise "Broken Bow" (Alternate version)

I've only now caught up with your story. I was a bit reluctant at first, since I'm also writing an alternate ENT (but then again, who doesn't? ), but yours is very different from mine.
Some of the segments are great. As others have pointed out, some things are a bit over the top (when Daniels talks to Archer and Polly's calendar), but it's a very enjoyable read.
I'm not sure about Earth being so belligerent and not having overcome poverty, yet, but it's your vision.
I like how much thought you put into the ship layout and the problems inherent in its design. You also manage to make it sound rather archaic (however, I fear the huge protocol attached to course changes will be limiting your freedom in storytelling, e.g. in battle scenes) and I like that.
I'm curious where this story will lead.
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