Re: Starship Enterprise "Broken Bow" (Alternate version)
Procedural nitpick: Mayweather shouldn't be giving orders - or requests - to anyone on the bridge if the captain's there unless he has explicit authorization to do so, meaning the captain has to say something like "Helmsman has the conn." Otherwise he's overstepping his bounds.
Other than that, a bonny installment! Good on ye!
Oh, and another suggestion for Prof. Partridge! Fergie:
"Understand, Commander: That torpedo did not self-destruct. You heard it hit the hull, and I was never here."
-Admiral James Greer