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Old May 27 2009, 08:11 PM   #4
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Re: An Unexpected Encounter (May '09 Challenge)

I think you need to be a bit clearer that Chapel leaves between Kirk winking at her and McCoy speaking - otherwise McCoy comes across as incredibly insensitive.

Good scene though.
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