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Old April 27 2009, 08:53 PM   #3
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Re: Starship Enterprise "Broken Bow" (Alternate version)

An interesting beginning.

I for one would like to see more. I do only have one issue. You should separate each line for who is speaking and not just do it in blocks, it makes it easier for people to read. Have a look at how others have done it.

Other than that, let's see some more.
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