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Old April 4 2009, 09:37 PM   #86
kitsune
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Re: Excelsior Technical Manual - Revived!

Praetor wrote: View Post
Although the appointment of most of her senior staff was a rather quick matter
quick -> straightforward

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A number of prominent Starfleet Captains and Commanders shied away from the assignment for fear it would break their careers as it had Styles's.
Styles's -> Styles'

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Sulu had been Starfleet's favored candidate
Starfleet's favored -> the preferred (to avoid repeating Starfleet in that sentence)

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Sulu was currently in service as helmsman
in service as -> serving as
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