I didn't get that vibe of unwanted attention from the last bit.
Apologies for my confusion--but do you mean you didn't like Gruner's behavior, that it wasn't written convincingly, or you feel that his advances were OK?
Or something else?
However, I did like that nod towards the religious side of the leading Federation man. You've got a big story to tell and the first step is good.
Thanks! I'm very glad you liked that scene...when I was writing that, I felt like that was where I REALLY got my sense of who Spirodopoulos was, at his core. Does he always live up to that? No more than any of us. But what you saw there...it makes him a real minority in the Sigils and Unions
version of human society, but that's what will always lay at his core.