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Old December 8 2008, 08:56 AM   #8
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Re: December Challenge Entry: Captives' Ransom

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Very nice work! I don't know why it should piss anyone off -- in a universe that celebrates diversity, there surely must be a place for Christianity, too. Say one mistake: Quick as a phaser bolt, he grabbed the hair at the back of Samís head his head to lock it into place.

I think you added an extra 'his head' in there. But other'n that, good job!
Eep! Good catch--thanks!

Anyway, glad you liked it.
Ha! And I made my own mistake while correcting yours. I meant to say, "Saw one mistake..."
Shouldn't it have been, "Done seen one of those?"
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