Nerys Ghemor wrote:
Very nice work! I don't know why it should piss anyone off -- in a universe that celebrates diversity, there surely must be a place for Christianity, too. Say one mistake: Quick as a phaser bolt, he grabbed the hair at the back of Samís head his head to lock it into place.
I think you added an extra 'his head' in there. But other'n that, good job!
Anyway, glad you liked it.
Ha! And I made my own mistake while correcting yours. I meant to say, "Saw one mistake..."