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Old October 31 2008, 10:51 PM   #3
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Re: Challenge Entry - A Time of Terror

captcalhoun wrote: View Post
you switched from past to present tense in there. y'might wanna fix that...
Where's the tense shift? I didn't notice it.

There's a fantastic pace to this story, USS Fardell, unfortunately that's also made it a bit confusing for me, I shall have to go back and read it again!

I would have like to see what state the freighter's crew were in and got to hear some of their stories - I think without that, the story leaves too much unexplained.
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